I walked slowly up the stairs.
Now that I had fully awakened, the hurt was starting to catch up with me. I clutched at my sides, the hole ripping through my chest.
I walked into the bathroom, and quickly took a shower, got in my holey old sweats, and brushed my teeth. Then I walked back to my room, turned out the light and crawled into bed.
I was just starting to drift off to sleep, when a scratching noise came from my window. I opened my eyes wide in alarm.
Maybe it was a burgular.
Or a kidnapper.
Or mass murderer.
Or maybe I’m just overreacting and it’s just the branch’s of a tree scraping against my window. I didn’t take any chances though; I reached under my bed and got my pepper spray.
Making sure to hold the spray tightly in my right hand so that I could spray quickly if necessary, I got up and tiptoed across the cold floor. When I got to the window, I hesitated. But then I heard scratching again, so I gathered up all my courage, and swiftly opened the curtains.
What I saw made my heart stop, and my breath go out with a whooshing sound.
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Edward.
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A/N: Sorry it's so short. I'll post more when I have the points! I wrote this a couple years back (has it really been that long...?). I never did get finished, only up to chapter 8 or so. I disappointed some people, I'm sorry! Anyway, I might decide to continue writing this again if people like it... so give me your honest opinion! Thanks 
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Well, this is a very interesting start here, the shuffling piece and the description there seems to indicate this person is recovering from a very dangerous and potentially fatal injury there, you definitely get the sense this person is perhaps not fully human with the kind of endurance currently on display with respect to the scale of the injuries being described...well, it certainly makes for a very intriguing start.
Well, the conclusions that this person's mind to jumped to right off the bat seem to indicate that we've got somebody that's been through a lot of potentially traumatizing situations that cause them to assume that the worst is about to happen to them when they hear this sound at night, either that or they are naturally a paranoid person, either way, this is getting more and more mysterious here.
Okay...so it looks like the creepy noises comes from a person visiting in the middle of the night, which I have to say is a bit creepy cause if you're going to arrive at someone's house in a hour late enough for said person to get terrified a phone call seems like a required courtesy there, or something besides sneaking up quietly, but umm, well a bit of a cliffhanger at the end there, and for a scene that is quite as simple as this one, I think you've done quite well here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Well, quite good.
As someone who've read many books i can honestly say that this was just like reading a novel of an experienced author.
Try to write chapter 2 a bit longer. Well, actually I think you can call this first article "prelog" instead
of "chapter 1"- it is too short.
Overall it looks good, I'm actually waiting to read the next chapter. You've got my eye on you =).
Hello! I love Twilight! So, nice plot going, even though it was far too short. I hope the next chapter's longer!
A few nitpicks:
Over-all, I liked it. Hope I helped.
Keep writing.
- Ariel<3'