Published November 4, 2011
This is my first poem:
Reading is my life,
My everyday activity
Every morning, day, and night
I keep a book somewhere near
A new world waiting to be discovered
By me--
the reader
Earth fades away,
I'm no long me,
I'm swept off my feet
By description and imagery
My brain's in a new body
My personality altered
My hearts beats loudly
As I turn each page
The book reveals its magic
It's characterisitics revealed,
Once I've found the right key
To find its inner core
It willingly lets me
Go deeper and explore
when the book reaches it's finish,
and shuts off the lights
my brain returns to me,
and leaves me with a smile
and gently nudges me
out the door of fiction.
Please set aside my feelings, and lash at me with full force. I know this is probably really elementary, and that I'm a really bad poet. Thank you so much!
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Hello there,
WOW! First things first .. if this was your first poem then WOW! ... My first poem was pants compared to this ... ;3
I can really relate to this poem as I am a very very avid reader and library go-er and reading is my favorite past time !!!
Lorna
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Thanks for the review! I'll get to those grammar errors!
~Audrey718~
Hai there Audrey!!
Hope you are doing fine =) Woot! First to review!!! XD
So I want to start off with saying that I absolutely loved this piece! And you really have talent as a poet! =)
I love the idea behind this and how you worked it out. There's a great imagery in this poem and a good rhyme/ rhythm so congratulations on that!
I haven't read a poem like this before and I loved that this was the first one XD You should keep writing poems!
Okay so here are the nitpicks!
"hearts" should be "heart"
"It's" should be "Its"
"it's" should be "its"
And in the last part you forgot to capitalize the first letters. And you forgot the punctuation in some parts so you should go back and look at that =) But other than that, LOVED IT!! XD
Hope this review helped =)
Keep writing!
-qaralynn-