Published September 22, 2011
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Whoa!! That was really awesome! I think the title went really well with the actual story, I mean I really felt like I was in the story as it was progressing. I can't really say there was anything wrong with it, all I can say is that it was great how you described every detail, and how you added vampires and werewolves in a kind of nonchalant way. Like: "Were gonna go see some vampires okay?" That was also really cool how you made everything pertain to real life, like how Cora lied to her Mother and procrastinated on her school work which almost every teenager does eventually.
Overall, this was really interesting, great descriptions, awesome characters, and I'm kinda cravin some more! I'm sure the next chapter will be as good if not even better.
Hey I loved this. I can't really say anything really wrong other than add a little bit more characteristics to them? Or something haha I can't really find any faults here although I'm not usually the best in finding faults anyways ^^. I loved this and I really can't wait to read more of this!! I await chapter two in eagerness. <3 Hope you get very wonderful reviews and may they help you. Hope you enjoy it here at YWS. If you need anything just post on my wall ^^.
Soulkana^^