The Last Time

You see, poems are one way to convey your emotions, and I can see yours here.

My suggestion is adding some metaphors or imagery to make it more beautiful and emotional, with that your readers may feel what you feel, making it more deep and emotional. This poems just looks like a list of things you won’t do again rather than a great poem that was supposed to be made hiding somewhere beneath it. Rather than just repeating "This is the last time I will..." why not make something like why you don't want to do that anymore and why does it hurt like that.

You know, poets are supposed to be like composers in music, while composers arrange music to give a different feel to the listeners, we give a different too by arranging words to give the readers/listeners something else.

Hope that helps,
-Veonymous

Hey
Great poem keep it up. I think it may need one or two more lines to finish it up. But that's basically all so keep it up. Also hope to read more in the year so keep updating please.

Hey there! Purple here to give you a review! Let's get started.
I can definitely see the strong and broken emotion in this. I hope this doesn't seem intruding but are you okay? This looks recent.
Anyway, I actually like the repetition in this, but you could change the "I will" after them to make it more powerful. Because when you say "I will" it's saying the things you can control and the things you are going to do. But, if you say something like "This is the last time I let you hurt me" for example, it's still showing your control but how they are out of your life in a stronger image. A few nitpicks I also have with the wording. "This is the last time I will make this seem one sided." You could revise to "This is the last time you say this is one sided".
Also, "This is the last time I will not pay." What are you referencing here? Paying for dinner or paying for the consequence of your actions? You could make this much clearer. I hope this was helpful
Have a good day!
~Purple