Jazz Hands

Hi!
To start off, I have to say you have an incredible style to your writing. There were parts in it, however, that I am not sure how I feel about. For instance, the lines:

"Like a half moon on a vicar boy like the money on your dress
All in the name of delicate flowes as a servant as a distant hex"

The don't feel like they necessarily belong. I also don't quite grasp a meaning to those lines.

"I've been put myself" is kind of redundant, but it is redundant for a reason and I can see that.
The way you write is eccentric and pretty unique, but it did cost me work in order to read it properly. The best way I can put this is that if the flow of your poem was a circle, those instances where your writing is difficult to understand are hooks on the circle, pulling outwards and causing hitches in the circle.
I'm not sure if this is a good or bad thing because it definitely gives your writing a more personal quality, like your own characteristic compared to others' writing.
Overall, it's a great, one of a kind type poem and I think it's up to you how to you want to write because it's great writing but not commonplace.
Keep writing and good luck,
Dianne E.C.E.

This was definitely interesting, if a bit confusing.

There's a lot going on and a lot of information to process, and even thought I've read this a few times, I'm still not sure if I understand it very well. I think you put a lot of your thoughts and feelings into this, so it's definitely very "You," if you understand what I'm saying.

Because I'm not clear on the message, I can't have any complaints, so that's good And anytime someone puts thought into their work, whether or not it makes sense to everyone, it's still poetry and who can judge whether it's good or not?

Thank you 567ajt!

Hey there. I thought it was a wonderful poem. Your ides were amazing and how you have described the poem is really good.
But i really didn't understand the first line- 'I've been put myself for auction in the hope for a better soul'
'I have been put myself'? Maybe i didn't understand the line or there might have been an error. But forgive me if i am wrong. And other than that i thought you could have used some punctuations.
But on the whole it was an amazing poem and i just enjoyed reading it.

This is an interesting poem, but I have a few things to offer, if I may. So in the following I will give you some advice on how to separate the flow of the ideas better, even if it with a simple period or comma.
"
I've been put myself for auction in the hope for a better soul(I would put a period here.) (With I've been put myself for auction...that part of line one was a bit confusing, could you clarify what you mean?)
No reply as of late(comma) what's up now no one really wants to know(Period)
To have a slave like me's a miracle(comma) but I can only wait(period)
They take one look at my genitals(Comma) nod their heads(Comma) and agree it's a shame(Period)
Cusped(Cupped?) my hands in the shape of a coffee cup(comma) hoping to be swashed down south(Period).
But navigation isn't my strong suit(comma) and so I remain hopelessly devout(dash)
Like the half moon on a vicar boy(comma) like the money on your dress(period)
All in the name of delicate flowers as a servant as a distant hex(Period)

Jazz hands
Jazz hands

Moonlight Sonata played like a schoolgirl(comma) squirming at the site of a peach(period)
Take it soft and like some placenta carcasses laugh on the beach(Period)
And staring at my tin can opaque was the witch was the golden swan(period)
Peck peck pecking and plucking at fixations taxed by the bonbonbonbon(period)
Hell bent on solitaire and muskets I sell myself to the air(period)
It will huff it will blow it will puff too my arrival I don't know where(Period)
Better stay away and make sure to beware the sight of beholded fish(period)
And swimming isn't such a bad idea after all of this(Period)
"

I hope you don't feel like I overstepped my boundries with this review, but with what I have offered, I believe that it will flow better. But please know that these are only suggestions and you do not have to take them.