Just a fair warning before reading this- anytime I write a poem it usually comes out depressing; I'm good trust
The rain never stops its pattering on my window
The rain never stops its pounding on my door
The roads, they flood
The rain never pauses
I can hear the falling drops, everywhere it blows
It seems to be sunny, but not where I go
It patters and falls, thumps and calls
It’s always raining, isn’t it?
I thought the rain would stop
Once I found myself happy
What’s the point of wearing this mask
If the rain continues with a drip, drip, drip
What if the rain did stop?
If it decided to go
How would the sun shine?
That’s something I might never know
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Hello, first this makes me think of a person with a dark cloud weighing over them, just pouring showers of damps that you feel down in the dumps,a perfect metaphor for depression right, being soaked no matter how many times you change, change your attire, attitude or mask. Yeah being under there so long I guess, you haven't felt the natural light in a while. To wonder what its warmth would feel like , would it be more comforting? that question is so chilling if it's one, one may never know.
Or its about floods in that case , Maybe one could try moving to a better environment one day😊
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Hi! Thank you for your review! I am currently living in a better place right now, and this is more based from past rather than present! Have a good day/night!
From a technical standpoint, I like the consistent rhyming and use of repetition. I feel like the rain here symbolises sorrow or inner bitterness. Here's my personal interpretation—
"The rain never stops its pattering on my window
The rain never stops its pounding on my door
The roads, they flood
The rain never pauses"
One thing I notice here is you specifically add 'my' before window/ door, probably describing that sorrow keeps visiting, sometimes gently like rain patting on your window and sometimes pouring and pounding, attempting to drown you by flooding without breaks. Or maybe it's about a chain of bad events that keeps happening to the speaker without interruptions, like rain.
"I can hear the falling drops, everywhere it blows
It seems to be sunny, but not where I go
It patters and falls, thumps and calls
It’s always raining, isn’t it?"
Sometimes while everyone's lives seem bright and beautiful ours drown in floods of sorrow and I think that is well described here. I especially love the line "it seems to be sunny, but not where I go". It could also refer to a situation in which a person's life might seem picture perfect and sunny but from the inside it's just cold cold sorrow. The last question here to the unknown asking if the rain is here forever shows a sense of both hope and despair, like the speaker is tired of hoping it would go.
"I thought the rain would stop
Once I found myself happy
What’s the point of wearing this mask
If the rain continues with a drip, drip, drip"
There is a strong imagery here, that I have to mention. But I wonder what the last two lines signify. Perhaps it suggests and questions what the point of pretending is if we keep crumbling apart on the inside. (I really do hope you're alright)
"What if the rain did stop?
If it decided to go
How would the sun shine?
That’s something I might never know"
I like the cycle of hopeful and hopeless, it's a very realistic emotional rollercoaster and quite a read for us people. ''How would the sun shine?'' is something a lot of us wonder and live within the fantasy of.
Alright, that's all, keep writing ^^
Thank you for the review! I really am good, it's more of a thing based from the past, where I had to "mask" a lot of my emotions, almost all the time :')
Anygays- thank you so much for your words! /gen
Welcome ^^