Published July 23, 2011
I tell myself,
"This is enough!"
I find reasons
To forget you.
But, I don't know why
It always happens to me.
Nothing makes sense,
Reasons run out of me.
And every time
I think of you
I just cry
And I don't know why.
I want to see your face,
Want to feel your embrace,
Though not to i try, yet i cry.
And I need you by my side.
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What the two people above me found confusing, I found intriguing.
Such as when you posted "Though not to i try, yet i cry", as brought to everyone's attention above, it has a sort of cryptic sense to it. I like that.
Though as was pointed out blatantly already, this was a little choppy. However, I can sympathize with this and overlook that to some extent.
Good poem, overall.
This poem was short, sweet and sad. I liked it, and just have a few comments. First of all, I couldn't tell if this was supposed to rhyme. If so, you didn't have any sort of rhyme scheme that I could see.
In this stanza it felt repetitive to see two lines ending with me. And here: I just didn't understand that at all. You could write, "Though I try not to, I cry" or just take out "though" or "yet". Otherwise, good job, I liked it!This poem was somewhat confusing, or I could tell the writer was confused when writing this. It was simple, short, and conflicting -- I liked it. Good job! There were a few mistakes, however. The lines were choppy and didn't flow very well, try adding more/less words to make it more even and smooth.
best wishes,
Nessa