Out of my heart,
Grows a path, with branches of each branch,
Forced , am I to have a fate
Miseries and a long way
A Journey has begun,
My eyes, blinded by the glow (light) of my Glorious One (lord)
Occurs a turn and starts the hurling of mysteries, at the sight of despair around
Startled, am I, before the reality of this life
Rises a query, within my mind, that have I unseen the darkness behind the light of the Luminous One (God)
Grows a rebellion against Him
Intended, have I, to break the fold of silence
Reward, what I get is, tears born in my eyes
Counted, am I , among the faithless
Unheard are the shrieks of my soul to the holiest
Prisoner of conscience have I become
Unaware of passing days and coming nights
Difficult gets the journey,
Trickles the sweat from my brows
Mysteries, as they were,remain tangled
Failure, as I feel, unable to find the curve of the road
Lies there a feel, making me helpless to detach the thought of watch over by the Greatest (God)
Begging, am I, to rest in peace but Unseen as It is, keeps me going
Strikes a thought like a thunder
Chosen am I just to wander
Would I be burning in hell for the eternity
Or when the soul departs, will I be opening my eyes to His beauty
Baffled am I, when isolation prevails this heart.
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This is amazing work. . seriously. Your word choices are good too. I can feel everything your talking about.
Keep it up!
"Unheard are the shrieks of my soul to the holiest"
-Shrieks is a good word in that sentence! wow. your teaching me some stuff. Cry is such a bland word, but shrieks just brings it out. c:
"Forced , am I to have a fate
Miseries and a long way
A Journey has begun,"
- Nice again. I like how you said its like a journey.
Okey, good job in all. The () I don't think NEED to be there, but I see why you put them in to help people understand what your talking about.
Thnk u, dats very nice of u
No problem.
Plzz cn u tell me one thing as I am new here... .. I have published dis poem bt de writer shown here is someone else.... I dont understand wats happening