A tiny "M" is tattooed on each one,
If you open a bag I'll guarantee fun.
So many bright colors I think I'll go blind,
To eat red or blue first, I can't make up my mind!
Of M&M's I'm a very big fan,
"They melt in your mouth, not in your hand!"
So I'll pop a few in with my mouth open wide,
Just waiting to taste the flavor inside.
I love so much the chocolate sensation,
These candies deserve a standing ovation!
I savor each one so it won't go to waste,
They each have an individual taste.
I suddenly peer down into my hand,
That once contained colors; now it is bland.
No more chocolate, this moment I dread,
I'll get some more soon, but for now I've been fed.
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I love how you have written this.
Especially with the fact that you've used rhyme.
Very good.
Awww, I loved it! I could see a handful of M&Ms as I read this poem! The rhyming added and kept a wonderful flow to this poem--it was nice and cutesy! Keep writing!
I loved it! Well done! You nicely captured the fun and sugary sweetness of M&Ms! Just lovely. Keep it up!
I liked this poem! Adorable, just adorable! Nicely done! Great!
Great job! A cute well-done rhyming poem about M&M's. Very refreshing.
Just one thing. You spelled "guarantee" wrong in the second line.
Keep writing!
Cute!
I really liked it.
I like it. It is a silly poem that actually rings completely true. We all love M&M's. I like the rhyming. It almost never seems forced. Except for rhyming wide and inside. That's a tad weak. Everything else is great.
I liked it.
I love M&M's! Wee! I went to the salon yesterday and got my nails painted like M&M's. Red, blue, orange, green and yellow. Diff colors on my feet. lol.
Your poem was very interesting. I like the rhyming. It went very well with the poem.
I think you should chop this off into stanzas, it would be better.
Great job, great poem.
Peace man,
Casey the AWESOME
Very interesting.
It's really fresh your style and definitely your theme.
I bet the ad agency will heavily pay you for this.
You should consider illustrating this poem.
The rhyming was neat too.
er... the I you captilazied seems to be in bold, nothing much but thought I'd point that out.
Aww! I think it's adorable! I love M&M's as well. Your rhyming is done very well except for perhaps "fan" and "hand," but sometimes that can't be helped so I'm not complaining. Great peom, you made me smile! I have nothing else to comment on! ^^ Keep writing!
~Yoyo
I liked it!
I loved this part!
You need to capitalize the 'i'. That's the only thing I caught!
Great job!
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