I liked how your line breaks were slightly off. However, it would have improved the flow of your poem if there were a few more commas in certain places. I'd qoute it and show you where I mean, but I don't know how to do that. Also, I don't believe poems have to rhyme-I actually hate writing poems that rhyme, and I don;t think there is a length requirement. Overall, I thought it was nice.
Points: 890
Reviews: 86
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