Extract from novel

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Prophecy.

When Adam's blood and Eve's flesh
Sit in Myst once more,
Only then the reign of Evil lore will end.
West of the Eastern plains, they will appear,
Those who are destined to rule
Out of the forest they will come,
In Mohar will they be,
At its hour of greatest need,
To birth a new house.

A light will shine in the darkness,
So hope will not fail.

Hence the Daughter of Evil will meet death eternal,
When the child of the new house comes to her powers,
Hence she will step up
To the magical challenge,
That will break the spells of evil.
Then Mohar will be free from the Evil,
That wanted to hold the world
In an eternity of Darkness.

Clara