Young Writers Society

Hi, time to review!

First of all, you could have started with a brief introduction of the story as without it, it becomes a bit confusing to the readers who haven't read the story.

"She creates a lot of suspense and tension that does good to the story. In some parts, it feels like you’re reading a suspense story rather than a fairytale romance." I think you could have given some examples to elaborate the buildup that you found interesting. Also, you could have added some incidences to make it more informative and clear.

I like that you emphasized on and could tell apart the differences between the clichéd story line and its retelling. You also brought out the "Never judge a book by its cover" in the line "...I think this tells a story of appearances deceive..." and in the fifth paragraph too. Although I haven't read the story, I did get an idea from your review.

Keep writing!

Best wishes,
I

Hi, time to review!

First of all, you could have started with a brief introduction of the story as without it, it becomes a bit confusing to the readers who haven't read the story.

"She creates a lot of suspense and tension that does good to the story. In some parts, it feels like you’re reading a suspense story rather than a fairytale romance." I think you could have given some examples to elaborate the buildup that you found interesting. Also, you could have added some incidences to make it more informative and clear.

I liked that you emphasized on and could tell apart the differences between the clichéd story line and its retelling. You also brought out the "Never judge a book by its cover" in the line "...I think this tells a story of appearances deceive..." and in the fifth paragraph too. Although I haven't read the story, I did get an idea from your review.

Keep writing!

Best wishes,
I
#TEAMTORTOISE

**My Thoughts**

What's up @AnoCannotUserName, I'm Lucy and and am here for my fifth review on this fine day. It seems as if @JesseWrites of the Aubergine Team already gave you a review, but don't worry, the Sage Green Team is here to give you one as well!

**Storyline**

I don't know exactly what this is. It looks like a book review Of "Soot and Slipper", but you format it sort of like an essay. I have never read this story, so this is what I got from your review:

Eugenie lives with her OK stepmom Marielle. Turns out Marielle is not actually a good person and tries to get rid of Eugenie (love the name by the way). Her fairy godmother saves the day and she lives happily ever after.

I do like how you refer to it to a Cinderella story, which makes it easier to understand, which is awesome. But, it isn't "like" a Cinderella story, I think it is the Cinderella story, just with different names. This may not be the case though.

**Jumpiness**

Woo! First time I've ever covered this topic, but I think it was needed. You jump around quite a bit. You go from preface to writing to your favorite part to Eugene and etc, etc. You could organize this a tad better and go from the story to your favorite parts. Maybe preface, beginning of the story, end, plot, the moral, and your favorite part. To me, that would look and read better.

Also, this is just a small thing, but this is so basic:

Thank you for reading my review.

Hello,

I have never read this story, so I will judge it on informational factors I see.

Is It To The Point?

Hmm...
It is quite short and kind of fast, but I think I can imagine a plot. I see a bunch of jumps from idea to idea, so that can help a reader learn more interesting bits within the main of this.

Work on spacing out and that can give more of the things I've mentioned above. ^

Will I Read This?

Maybe. I saw a spoiler, so that kind of throws me off. It is possible that I'll order this book.

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