Heya Prompt!
Hope you're doing well today or tonight, depending on what side of the world you're on, obviously. I'm here to give you a review for Review Day! Let's get started, now, shall we?
Alright!
Before I start, I'm not quite the best with reviewing poetry, but ya know, challenges are great.
So I did look at the link that you have in the beginning, and I mostly used that to do critiquing. But your words are amazing. Like, the word "sanguine". Like Q said, in the first review you got, I did kinda get thrown off with that word, and I had to search it up just to make sure it was red, lol.
Another thing I adore about your poem here, is that in such few words, you have told us so much more! It's fabulous. I actually have trouble with that, hehe, so I'm quite impressed.
Now I shall start critiquing!
that fall - macabre, austere - and you
Like I said earlier, I followed that link you have up there to do most of the critiquing, and I'd like to say that although this line is one that "pops out", it has two extra syllables. So it has eight instead of six. ^^
with ruffled eye
This part... Honestly confused me. How, exactly, can an eye be ruffled? You could mean this not literally, to get the imagery, but I have no clue how to image that. So maybe just use some other two-syllable word that would describe the "eye".
I shall wrap up my review here now! I hope this review helped in one way or the other. Of course, if you have any questions, feel free to ask me whenever! I look forward to seeing more from you soon. Keep it up!
Keep on writing and Happy Review Day!
~Liberty
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