That moment was so perfect
I wish it never had to end.
That moment we realised what we felt for each other
When I knew you were more than a friend.
That moment everything stopped and I was hypnotised
I didn’t notice anyone, or anything
Except your deep, brown eyes.
That moment when my heart pounded fast
Oh so very fast. I could not forget that look on your face
There was no logic in my mind, just the smile you gave
But how can a moment so amazing, be so dangerous.
As we are both committed to another
And cannot be with each other.
I tried to forget that moment, that perfect moment
But I could not.
Then one day I felt a breath behind me,
I turned and then you kissed me.
That moment so amazing, that kiss so beautiful,
This feeling so magical, this love so perfect.
An innocent friendship, to a disastrous affair.
Wonderful moments, but we’re being unfair,
We risk too many people being hurt
But losing you, or them hurt
Which is worse?
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Its GOOD!Probably because you have put your all feelings in it.
That moment was so perfect that day,
Using THAT two times was kind of... weird.
Other than that I can't find anything more weird, although love within itself is weird and can be defined in many ways by a very strange array of people. Good job. I have to aggree with Dynamo, poetry = science just as well as people + skills = successful people.
...wow, that was very profound. People write at there best when they put their heart into it, looks like you got it down to a science.