Young Writers Society

I really enjoyed your writing! Thank you sharing

I love how your poem really makes me think. Like, really really think. You can connect to the reader really well, even by using such simple, yet very complicated sentences.

Thank you for that. I love the simpleness and the thought that you put into it.

Good job!
Ailah

I really enjoyed your writing! Thank you sharing

I love how your poem really makes me think. Like, really really think. You can connect to the reader really well, even by using such simple, yet very complicated sentences.

Thank you for that. I love the simpleness and the thought that you put into it.

Good job!
Ailah

Hey Andy.

This review will be brief. There isn't much of a technical aspect to pick apart, wherein lies my 'critique'. You beg a philosophical question in the title alone, and throughout your work you emphasize 'being' via further philosophical questioning...

and that's it. Your work falls into a liminal space between aphorisms and an actual essay, lacking the conciseness of the former and the depth of the latter. My big suggestion is to develop this further. Instead of repeating the word 'being' and relying on the audience's implied understanding of being, try analyzing your own concept of being. Push further your questioning, your hypothesis, and let us know exactly what being is. Your essay is promising, it just needs more weight for both you as the author and us as the audience to chew on.

Onto smaller things:

Why?

One is to be as one is not to be

Is not being, being at the same time?

Can one be a being without being a being?

Can one bend words to describe being a being by not being a being. Subsequently not being but describing being is a lie.

To not to be is to be.

Is there no being or not being? Being is in of itself to be and not being?

This is being.