Days are more then weak and dreary

Hi, happy review day! I really liked this piece. I agree with katefrench461 in that I read this as sort of a diary entry or perhaps a letter. This could be, in part because of the signature at the bottom. I couldn't really find anything that I thought needed changing as I'm guessing you intentionally didn't use any punctuation. Overall I quite enjoyed this poem.
Nicely done!
-Ruby-

Hey Weather here with a review

You have a good piece going on here. It has a deep meaning to it and had a slight darkness to it without being completely somber.

"Days become harder than ever now
I seem to always be dangling on The edge"

I'm not sure why you've capitalized the word, "The" in the middle of a sentence. I feel like you should have elaborated a bit more on what is making the days become harder. What the person is going through, their thought process or feelings, so the reader can relate a bit more.

"my love does not know Of this yet so I must not speak
Aloud I must keep quiet and to Myself she does not know
that I Plan on going over this horrible Edge and say goodbye to life"

You have more awkward capitalization's here e.g. "Of", "Myself" and "Edge" I'm not sure if this is intentional but it just reads confusingly because it's not the start of a new sentence or concept. If you want to emphasis a point more just write it in italics or something along those lines.

Overall a nice piece, keep writing. Hope I was of help to you.

--Weather

Okay, so this isn't my review yet. I'm still dissecting it. I would just like to say that it's really beautiful and you did a very we'll job! So since this is your first piece on here I'm going to tell you something. Don't let people change the way you write. If you like the way you wrote this then keep it! That goes for all your writing. Because if you let someone change the way you write, you're also letting them change the way you view the world!

I promise to review this as soon as I can at school!

Hello!!
I like this piece. Personally, I read is as kind of like a diary entry (although I'm not sure if that is what you're exactly intending). This form you've chosen makes it flow well, and although sometimes poetry needs punctuation, I think you've done well without it. It gives it an air of either vague insanity or just apathy (which I think makes more sense given the depressive aspect of the content). I also enjoy your use of capitalization. The capitalized words obviously have more meaning than the others. That being said, sometimes the extra meaning the capitalization adds is not particularly clear (like "The" in the first line or "Of" in the second). I don't think that these were necessary as it confuses the reader. In addition, I find it kind of odd that you continue to capitalize I's throughout the piece. Given that you did not choose to capitalize the closing "-mr.hawkins", it isn't consistent to continue to use the traditional grammar rule for the I's.

This piece is really good, and I know my suggestions/ comments are super finicky. You don't have to listen to anything I've said, as this is your poem for you to do as you like.

Good work and keep writing!!