I've like never written poetry but I like chickens. I know I'm a little late but here is my chicken poem.
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Which came first, the chicken or the egg?
Wondered Little David Begg
See, David Begg wasn't too smart
He can't tell his hens and roosters apart
He did not know that chickens, on the scale of things, are new
But eggs, have been here since before things flew
But little David Begg didn't know that
So he went on wondering about all of this beneath his hat
and in the end, no one told little David Begg
Whether it was the chicken or the egg
He doesn't know to this day
But that?
That is okay.
I love your Poem. <3 I love how it actually rhymes unlike mine, I find it hard to rhyme feeling or anything. But your Doing great <3 Cant wait to read more of your work. I too like chickens, They are cute, I also like ducks and Geese <3 Feel free to pm/dm me if you want to talk about chickens <3
The rhymes we'll teach our children. "The story of David Begg". (I don't think the generation of our kids will be into this sorta thing but I'm just saying ya know?)
Firstly, I like it!
Secondly, I like it!
Lastly, I LIKE IT!
I'd actually end my review here, but then you'd miss out on everything I have to say about all the goodies in this poem.
This is what puts this poem into that funny old tale category that your parents read you or you read it in kindergarten.Which came first, the chicken or the egg?
no one told little David Begg
Whether it was the chicken or the egg
He doesn't know to this day
But that, is okay.
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I like this poem, very funny! I feel like the last line was kind of short, so maybe "But that? That is okay." would have been better to kind of "extend" the life of the line a little. The comma between "that" and "is" is kind of out of place, but I get that you were going for a pause, almost like we are wondering if that is really okay, but then we conclude that it indeed is. So I would have maybe formatted it differently like I suggested above.
Overall, I'm a little sensitive to flow and some lines didn't seem like they shared the same rhythm as the rest of it, but I'm guilty of doing the same thing myself so I don't wanna seem too critical.
Also I'm sure there's some serious philosophical humor going on here that I can't catch, for example, "chicken, on the scale of things are new, but eggs are here since before things flew." Is that a reference to reptile eggs?
Is this poem making it seem like David Begg is 'not smart' for pondering these things, and the narrator is being a smart-mouth by saying "eggs obviously came before chickens" but doesn't understand that David Begg actually is wondering about the *concept* of which came first, the chicken or the chicken egg? Or is the narrator even smarter than that because they're thinking about the entire evolutionary perspective. AGHH -tears hair out- Is David Begg taking the phrase literally? I don't know! haha.
These questions are not trying to tear apart your poem, rather I'm just a simpleton trying to understand it 
I think its a very cute take on this idea.
I like this quirky lil poem. It's great!
chicken, on the scale of things are new, but eggs are here since before things flew." Is that a reference to reptile eggs?
Is this poem making it seem like David Begg is 'not smart' for pondering these things, and the narrator is being a smart-mouth by saying "eggs obviously came before chickens" but doesn't understand that David Begg actually is wondering about the *concept* of which came first, the chicken or the chicken egg? Or is the narrator even smarter than that because they're thinking about the entire evolutionary perspective. AGHH -tears hair out- Is David Begg taking the phrase literally? I don't know! haha.
Heh. Heheh. Okay, this is nice. Hiya, I'm penn.
The humor is a little subtle, and for others, it'd probably be hard to notice. The spiritual essence of this little piece, however, absolutely dominate the poem.
I like it. It's smart, and there's a sort of familiarity with Little David Begg, if only because I'm reminded of Forrest Gump.
My favorite part of this has to be the last line. It gives out a pleasant feeling, that knowing isn't everything, and that it's okay to not know things about the world.
Or, maybe, I'm reading a little too much into a poem about chickens. Who knows?
Hello Andrewknorpp,
This was such a funny poem to read. Very enjoyable indeed. I liked that David Begg had "egg" in his name. Very clever! Also, the ryhming in the poem added to the silliness. One thing:
He did not know that chickens, on the scale of things, are new
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