Published February 24, 2010
BitterSweet
I wish you the candy mountain tops
throwing up in the clouds.
I wish the you heavens above
I wish you the depths of hell.
I wish you the joy and
I wish you the love
I wish you the pain I dwell.
Chorus:
I wish you sugar
In your sour Life
I wish you hatred and a bloody knife.
I wish serenity,for your aching pain
and destruction for the hope you gain
I wish you the the best I wish you The worst
I wish you the bittersweet.
I wish you the best I wish you the worst
I wish you the BitterSweet.
I wish you you the cloudiest storms
on your wedding day
I wish you were torn and broken apart
I wish that you were okay
I wish you were dead i wish you were gone
I wish that you would just leave
I wish you were here I wish you were here
I wish you were here with me.
Chorus:
I wish you sugar
In your sour Life
I wish you hatred and a bloody knife.
I wish serenity,for your aching pain
and destruction for the hope you gain
I wish you the the best I wish you The worst
I wish you the bittersweet.
I wish you the best I wish you the worst
I wish you the BitterSweet.
Oh I hate That
That i love you so
And the worst part
You completely know.
So I sit here
just thinking of you
If you think of me
BitterSweetly too.
Reprise:
Do you wish me sugar
In my sour Life
Do you wish me hatred and a bloody knife.
Do you wish serenity,for my aching pain
and destruction for the hope I gain
I wish you the the best I wish you The worst
I wish you the bittersweet.
You wish me the best I wish you the worst
I wish you the BitterSweet.
We're wishing the best We're wishing the worst
We're wishing the bitter sweet.
My Sour sweet and gone tell me
If you wish me Bittersweetly.
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Very Good! I write songs too and this is pretty good! The first thing, though, that threw me off was your first line:
It's quite jarring, actually, and not in a pleasant way... It's good to have a gripping beginning, but this is a bit stretched. The rest is pretty good, although the song idea has been used before, (James Taylor's "Bittersweet") so depending on the melody and rhythm, it may be a bit cliched.
Hope I Helped!
-KEK