All you need is God.

by Amberla93

Published February 11, 2011

You think the end is near... because nothing's ever clear.. anymore.
And everything changes, you sit and watch, as your whole life... rearranges.

You think that you'll never make it through.. and your always unsure what you should do.
There are times when your tears fall like the rain... and you wonder why there's always so much pain.

You want to know what you did to deserve it.. You want to find a way to reverse it.
You want to bring it to an end, and you know, you need more then just a friend.

We've all had our hardships, our heartbreaks, and troubles.
But what counts is how you bring yourself out of the rubble.
While easier said then done... you must remember, there are more ways out then one.

But you see, finding your way is sometimes hard.
Because sometimes it means letting down your guard.
You may think it odd, but the way is simple. All you need is God.

Comments & reviews · 2
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HHemayed
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HHemayed commented Comment · Feb 11, 2011

I love it!It's excellent,no changes needed.Plus,I love the way you think:)Good job

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ehte92
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ehte92 wrote a review Review · Feb 11, 2011

Hello there,


You think the end is near... because nothing's ever clear.. anymore.Instead of using ever clear just use clear
And everything changes, you sit and watch, as your whole life... rearranges.

You think that you'll never make it through.. and you're always unsure what you should do.
There are times when your tears fall like the rain... and you wonder why there's always so much pain.fall like rain sounds better.

You want to know what you did to deserve it.. You want to find a way to reverse it.
You want to bring it to an end, and you know, you need more then just a friend.

We've all had our hardships, our heartbreaks, and troubles.This line did not rhyme much as the others. Try using some other words.
But what counts is how you bring yourself out of this rubble.
While easier said than done... you must remember, there are more ways out than one.

But you see, finding your way is sometimes hard.
Because sometimes it means letting down your guard.
You may think its odd, but the way is simple. All you need is God.


All in all it was a good piece. Try improving your vocabulary a bit and try not to make any grammatical mistakes whe you are finally posting it. Some of the rhyming sounded like they were forced.
Keep writing.. :D



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