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My Norse Story, chapters 7-8

by AmandaRose

Published August 24, 2026

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In Norse

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Chapter 7.

Their trek to the edge of camp was a silent one. Kjartan kept his eyes down, staying alert, but his mind was elsewhere.

They soon stopped next to a small shelter, setting their things inside and making camp for the night out of the rain. Kjartan settled down on the ground, leaning back against the stump of the tree that was being used for a tentpole.

“Stay close, gentlemen.” Carson cautioned, glancing back at him warily. Kjartan didn’t reply.

“Of course.” Alvis said quietly. Carson nodded and sat down as well, while Finn knelt out front to get a fire started. After a few minutes, he stood.

“I’ll go scrounge up something to eat.” At a nod from Carson, he walked away, heading back to camp. Bjorn glared at his back until the tent flap closed, blocking him from sight.

Alvis noticed his tension and went to stand next to his friend.

“Hey.” He said quietly, so only Bjorn could hear him. He grunted in reply. 

“Leave him be, Alvis. He has the right to be frustrated.” Kjartan murmured. Carson pretended not to hear and went about the business of sharpening his sword.

Alvis pursed his lips but sat down anyway, giving Kjartan a sideways glance, which he ignored, and the group fell silent again.

The sound of incoming footsteps broke Kjartan’s train of thought and he looked up to see Finn entering, carrying a pot in one hand and a stack of empty bowls in another with an impish grin on his face.

“Carson! It’s venison stew! Someone went hunting this afternoon and they’re still working on processing the meat. We’re eating like kings tonight.” He sat down by the fire and started ladling the stew out into the bowls, passing them to the Northmen first and then one to Carson, who smiled as he grabbed it.

“The gods have smiled upon us after all, then.”

Kjartan cringed at the mention of the gods, but he covered it by taking a bite. The stew was surprisingly delicious, given its limited ingredients. The warmth of the stew chased away the chill that had settled into his bones, and he hummed with approval. There was a certain… richness to it that he didn’t recognize. Perhaps it was some herb that didn’t grow in the North. Bjorn on the other hand, devoured the contents of his entire bowl immediately and ladled up a second helping without asking.

“Eat much?” Kjartan teased, and Bjorn elbowed him in reply.

Finn was hollering with laughter while Alvis and Carson exchanged a glance as if to say, “What are we to do with these people?”

As the meal progressed, a more relaxed mood came over the group. But Kjartan felt a small tingling at the back of his mind that he couldn’t quite ignore. The warmth from the stew hadn’t faded. If anything, it spread, filling his limbs and offering one of the most comforting feelings he’d ever experienced. He took off his outer fur to roll up and use as a pillow, laying down to get comfortable. The warmth had faded slightly, but he felt… good. A little fuzzy perhaps, but good.

He shook his head. The exhaustion must be getting to him.

He could hear the other men settling down as well, figuring out sleeping arrangements. Most of it fell on deaf ears though, as he was soon fast asleep.

***

Kjartan wasn’t sure how much time had passed, but eventually, he stirred, opening his eyes a bit as he rolled over, but what he saw made him freeze, every muscle coiled tight.

There was someone else in the tent, and Carson and Finn were nowhere to be seen. 

He couldn’t quite make out the figure in the darkness, but he was fairly certain it was a woman. The slender curve of her shoulders, and the way her hair fell down her back… Wait a second. Red hair.

“Eylin?” He whispered, confused. The figure turned her head toward him, and in the moonlight he could just make out part of her profile.

“You’re supposed to be sleeping.” She replied quietly, but her tone lacked bite.

“I was.” He chuckled. “What are you doing here?” 

Her shoulders lifted in what he assumed was a shrug.

“I was the one to relieve their watch.” She said it so matter-of-factly, as though that explained everything.

He hummed thoughtfully, and they fell into silence for a long while. 

“Do you believe us?” He asked quietly. 

She didn’t respond for a long time. Long enough that he wondered if she’d even heard him. The rain began to let up, lightening to just a drizzle.

“I believe that you believe it.” She finally whispered, her voice barely reaching him in the stillness of the night. 

“That’s better than nothing, I suppose.” He returned dryly. Her head turned sharply toward him.

“No. It’s not. Because if what you believe is the truth, then we are all in line for something we’re not ready for. Of everything you’ve said today, one thing I’ve agreed with. If the Varakai attack again, we will not win this time.”

“Not alone.” He countered. “Not separated.” He pursed his lips, reaching for a stick on the ground, snapping it in half. “Alone, we are weak.” He set the pieces side by side, snapping them in half again so there were now four sticks. Then he put those together and tried to break them, and they wouldn’t break. “Together, we are unbreakable.” He looked up at her, trying to see her eyes in the darkness. “This is why I came here. But now…” He sighed, shaking his head. “Now everything changes. Whether you believe us or not, whether you help me or not… Somebody is doing this, and they’re laying the blame at my feet. The only reason I can think of for it is that someone wants this alliance to die before it’s ever born. And the only people who would seek such a thing are those whom an alliance would hurt the most.”

She let out a huff. “But how would the Varakai even know such things? The plans of a Northern chieftain don’t often reach the Mordren Mountains unaided.”

His jaw clenched. He couldn’t deny it.

“How certain are you that it isn't just a band of Northern renegades displaying rebellion. You’re quite young for a chieftain, surely you’ve considered the possibility of backlash.”

“I have.” He growled. “The way you described your attackers… By all accounts they do sound like Northmen. But the Syreeta was the first ship to leave harbor in over a month's time. No vessel could have departed after us and reached Helgryn Isle a full day earlier, all the while escaping our notice.”

“Are you absolutely certain about that? They could have slipped by you in the night.”

He sighed. “You’ve never been on a ship, have you?”

She didn’t reply, so he continued.

“Yes, generally, it is possible for a ship to slip by another ship in the night and be long gone by morning. But when both ships are following exactly the same route, especially on such a short journey, sailing by wind alone makes it extremely difficult to take a detour wide enough to not be seen. They couldn’t have started so far behind us that we didn’t see them the night before and advanced so far ahead that we couldn’t see them the next morning either and still only arrive less than a full day ahead of us. It’s just not possible.”

“Hm.” She turned away. 

He pursed his lips as they fell into silence, his fingers finding the necklace he wore. Playing with it had become a nervous habit of his.

“What is that?” Her voice caught him off guard.

“What is what?” 

“That.” She pointed at his hand. They must be nearing morning because the darkness didn’t seem quite so dark anymore. He could see the curiosity in her expression, despite her attempts to remain nonchalant.

“My family crest.” He answered, reaching up to take the necklace off. He handed it to her and she accepted it gingerly, inspecting it through the low lighting.

“It’s very intricate.” She remarked, tracing the design with her fingertips.

“I suppose it is, at that. About every few generations or so new elements are added to it, but the raven and sword has always been the focal point. The Ironfist family has borne the symbol for centuries. This specific version is as old as my grandfather.”

She handed it back to him. “Good for you.”

He smirked. “You’re not easy to win over are you?”

She side-eyed him in reply, and he shook his head. He found himself doing that a lot when she was around.

“Can I show you something?”

She stiffened slightly. “Depends on what it is.”

“I want to show you what we found shortly before you met us. The reason we’re so perplexed.”

She frowned. “You mean that mark you were staring at?” 

He nodded. “Did you get a good look at it?” 

She shook her head.

“We can make it there and back before the others wake up.” He offered. She was clearly intrigued, he could tell by how her posture had changed.

She stood up silently. “Fine. But I better not regret this.”

He smiled wryly.

“Yes Ma’am.”

Chapter 8.

Once Eylin exited the lean-to, she stepped back, allowing Ironfist to lead the way, but she still kept her hand resting on the dagger in her belt. 

Rays of dawn’s light were scattered throughout the sky, but it was yet early enough that their breaths were forming little puffs of fog. 

They remained silent as they made their way through the twilit camp, but Ironfist halted just as they made it to the edge of the clearing.

“Erm…” He gestured from Eylin to the trees. “How do we get back to the village?”

Ohhh. Right. She’d forgotten about the blindfolds.

With a deep sigh, she shook her head. “Come on.” She muttered, internally berating herself for the slip-up.

Upon reaching the remains of the village, she slowed to be behind him again and he took the hint, getting his bearings quickly and taking her to the village square, where she’d first come upon them. 

The sun was just peeking up from the horizon, shining just enough light across the sea for her to see the mark he pointed to.

“This is it.” He murmured, stepping aside so she could see.

“It looks just like your necklace.” She whispered, gently fingering the blackened marks. This enlarged version, even though much simpler in design, was still far more impressive. Far more… Real. It was just the raven perched on the handle of the sword, a regal, brutal attitude about it. The side flourishes that resided in the necklace were nowhere to be seen on this design, nor were the fine details, such as the raven’s eyes or talons. 

“Exactly.” He growled. “Whoever is doing this clearly wants to sabotage my reputation. If they can spread enough rumors that Kjartan Ironfist was responsible for such a massacre as this, then nobody in their right mind would align with me.”

Eylin pursed her lips, looking up at him. “What are the chances it’s not the Varakai? It could be rebel pirates looking to cause a panic. I’ve seen it happen before.”

He shook his head. 

“If that was the case, they’d have no need to frame me. A panic is a panic no matter who causes it.” 

“I suppose.” Eylin turned her gaze to the sea, as if it held the answers they sought. She rubbed her injured arm absently, grateful she had no further need of a bandage. Such things tended to be quite bothersome.

Suddenly they heard something. Eylin looked down and saw a pebble scattering across the cobblestone toward them as if it had been kicked by accident.

She drew her dagger and noticed Ironfist looking around frantically for a weapon. He ended up settling on a board that was somehow still intact and tested its weight.

They heard the sound of footsteps running and Finn popped out from behind a building.

Eylin gave a frustrated growl as she resheathed her dagger.

“Take better care, lad!” She huffed as he came up to them.

“It’s father!” He panted, coming to a stop. “Eero tried to attack the Northmen in their sleep and father caught him. They’ve challenged each other to a duel. You must come quickly, everyone thinks he’s kidnapped you.” He gestured wildly in Ironfist’s direction.

“How did you know where to find us?” Ironfist’s eyes narrowed.

A flush crept up Finn’s neck and he didn’t respond.

“Answer him, boy.” Eylin said lowly.

“I heard the two of you talking this morning. I couldn’t sleep, so I stayed near the tent just in case. I drifted off soon after you left.” 

Eylin’s jaw clenched. “So Eero slipped right past you?”

Finn glared down at her. “Don’t you start, you were the one who was supposed to be on watch.” He turned, heading back up the hill. “Now come! Or father will have both our hides.”

***

As the three ran back through the forest, Kjartan’s mind raced even faster. He kept finding himself staring at Eylin's arm. Just yesterday, she’d had a bandage that was continually soaked red and she could barely move her arm. Today it merely looked a little sore. He couldn’t wrap his mind around it.

And a duel? The man the boy spoke of relied on a staff to walk when he’d met him. 

When they finally breached the treeline and entered the clearing, Kjartan nearly stopped breathing. 

Everyone was clustered at the center of camp, circling around the two men. The tension was so thick Kjartan could cut it with his sword.

If he had one. 

He glanced nervously at the tent where their weapons had been deposited the night before, calculating the odds of getting them back anytime soon. They were little to nothing.

They shoved their way through the crowd until they were standing in front.

“Uncle! What is the meaning of this?” Eylin called out. 

The man turned to look at her, and Kjartan could scarcely believe this fierce warrior was the old man he had met last night. 

As Kalman walked toward her, all evidence of his former limp was gone, and his expression radiated rage.

“Where were you?” He bellowed. She straightened, glaring up at him.

“The Northman wanted to show me something that might lend evidence to his claims. I found it worth investigating.”

He glared down at her but Kjartan cued in on something else. That wasn’t anger in his eyes, not entirely. He’d been worried. “We will speak of this later. I have other problems just now.” He glanced back to the center of the circle and to a man Kjartan hadn’t seen before.

That must be Eero. Kjartan craned his neck, looking for Alvis or Bjorn, but only the faces of the islanders filled his vision. He hoped they’d been restrained somewhere as soon as the fight broke out. Otherwise… He shook his head. He wouldn’t go there, not now.

“Kalman, son of Roark.” Eero’s voice boomed. Kalman’s shoulders tensed as he turned to face him. He was wearing brown trousers and a green tunic, which he began unbuttoning as he spoke, underneath which he had on a white linen shirt. “What do you plan to do with these raiders who reside in our camp?” A murmur of surprise ran through the crowd as all who had not yet seen the Northmen questioned their neighbor curiously and some began shouting. Eero passed his tunic to a woman in the crowd who placed it on the little girl beside her. The woman smiled up at him, but Kjartan thought it looked more cunning than warm.

“Silence, my brethren.” Eero raised a hand and the crowd quieted. Kjartan saw a muscle tick on Kalman’s forehead as his jaw tightened. 

“I plan to judge them fairly.”

“Fairly?” Eero shouted. “Where was fair when their people leveled our village? Where was fair when they ransacked our home? Where was fair when the blood of our fathers, brothers, sisters, and mothers was spilt? They do not deserve fair, Kalman. They deserve death!” A roar of approval rang from the crowd and Kjartan shifted uncomfortably as Eylin clearly became angrier.

“I decide who deserves what, Eero. You would do well to remember this.” Kalman replied, drawing his sword. 

“If you will not give our dead the justice they deserve…” Eero advanced menacingly, pulling an axe from a nearby stump of wood. “Then you are unfit to lead the living.”

Silence fell. Kjartan saw the color drain from Eylin’s face and it looked as though the breath left her body.

He frowned.

Kalman took a step forward, casting a long slow look at the people around him. His gaze lingered on Eylin and his sons the longest. 

“So be it.” His words were spoken quietly but they carried across the meadow as if he’d shouted them. 

He advanced slowly, and the two men squared off. 

Kjarten leaned in close to Eylin. “What’s the matter with everyone?”

She met his eyes slowly, and there was a glassy look to them. “Eero has challenged my uncle’s right to lead. This means a fight to the death.” 

His eyes widened and he glanced back to the men right as Eero made the first move.

***

Eylin froze. She could hardly breathe as she watched the scene unfolding before her. Eero swung his axe. Kalman dodged it and tried to find an opening of his own, but Eero was too quick, despite his age. 

She looked over at Skadi who was holding Tyra protectively. That tunic was too big for Tyra’s small frame and it made Eylin angrier than she cared to admit to see her wearing it. She shouldn’t have to see this. Skadi should have taken her far away the moment this started. 

Her fury helped her come back down to earth a little bit and she forced herself to watch the match, ignoring Ironfist’s questions. The man was worse than a bothersome child.

Finally, he quieted, but she honestly hardly noticed. 

Kalman lunged, swiping his sword where Eero’s neck should have been but he stepped back just in time. The blade still nicked him though, causing a small stream of blood to trickle down his neck. 

The crowd was beginning to cheer for each man in turn as the fight went on, regardless of politics or preference. They were getting caught up in the sport of it, and it made her blood boil. 

Suddenly, Eero tripped over a divot in the ground, falling forward and Kalman took advantage of his position, reaching his sword down and using the tip of it to catch on the axe blade, tossing it aside as he advanced.

He raised his sword, ready to plunge it through Eero’s heart, but the older man rolled away, retrieving his axe and bringing it down upon Kalman in a swing he tried to block but it still threw him off balance. 

“You’re getting soft in your old age, Eero.” Kalman taunted, unable to contain his grin as he scrambled out of the axe’s reach. “Forfeit, man. I do not wish to kill you.”

Eero growled, lunging without hardly aiming. “Traitor!”

The people went wild, cheers and boos competing to drown each other out. 

Eylin could sense Ironfist’s restlessness, noticed how his gaze never lingered in one place too long. 

***

Kjartan growled in frustration as tension rose. Where were his men? Eero was becoming uncoordinated, which was arguably even more dangerous. If this ended in his favor, every survivor in this meadow would be trying to kill them. 

He backed up, slipping through the crowd, which was far too engrossed with the spectacle to notice him. He jogged to the edge of camp, looking for the lean-to they’d slept in the night before. He opened the tentflap, finding his men tied to the tree trunk.

“Captain! Where have you been?” Bjorn grumbled as Kajrtan knelt to unfasten their bindings. 

“Places.” He muttered dryly as the last of the ropes fell away. “We need to leave. Now.”

“You’re not going anywhere.” Carson stood at the doorway of the lean-to, sword drawn, an expression of utter misery on his face. “If we have to see this through, so do you.”

“He’s right.” Alvis murmured. “We caused this. It would be dishonorable to leave now. We have to help.”

Kjartan scoffed. “Are you mad? If Eero wins this fight, we’re dead men. We need our weapons.”

Carson’s jaw clenched. “Now that I can help you with. Just promise me you’ll stay.” 

Kjartan glared at the young man for a long moment, and sighed. “Very well. As long as you give us your word you’ll be on our side should this end the way I think it will.”

“I will fight for my father’s cause.” He replied.

Kjartan gave a sharp nod. That was good enough. “Then lead the way.”

***

Eylin didn’t know where Ironfist had gone, nor did she care. He was the last of anyone’s worries now. Her uncle was about to die. 

***

Eero swung his axe at Kalman’s legs, the long handle knocking his feet out from under him and he fell to the ground. Every muscle in Kjartan’s body tensed as he drew his sword. Nobody paid any heed.

Eero stepped on Kalman’s sword arm, immobilizing him.

“My turn.” He sneered as he raised his axe one last time. 

***

Eylin’s throat tightened, her fingers finding her dagger uselessly. There was nothing she could do. To join the fight would be to forfeit her own life. 

Though… It likely would be forfeit anyway with Eero in charge. She’d have to leave. 

But then Eero’s swing was blocked by another man’s sword.

Ironfist. 

She gasped when he shoved the older man backwards, using his free hand to tear the axe from his grip while he still had the element of surprise, knocking Eero down to the ground, and planting his foot on the man’s chest to hold him there.

“Not today.” His quiet words carried across the meadow as the stunned crowd looked on, once more struck dumb.

Eylin took a hesitant step forward as Kalman rose slowly, his eyes narrowing to slits. 

“This is not your fight. Back away.” 

The Northman glanced back at him, his expression morphing from confusion to sheer frustration. “Has not enough blood been spilt? Look around you! Do you people truly thirst for more?”

Kalman tensed, waiting for the people’s response. 

***

Kjartan glanced down at the man beneath him. 

The green eyes that glared up into his were full of hate, but… he noticed something more. It looked almost like hurt. 

“Finish it. Show them what you are, you dog!” He growled.

For a long moment, Kjartan merely stared. Finally, he stepped away, bending down to collect the scattered weapons. He passed the axe to Eylin, and presented Kalman with his sword, his head bowed respectfully.

“You have fought with honor this day. Let this be the end of it.” Kjartan turned to glance back at Eero. “Back down now. Should you pick a second fight, you will not win it.”

The man stood up slowly, rising to his full height. “Mark my words, Kalman, son of Roark. This is not finished. We will meet like this again, and next time you won’t have your Northman pet to save you.” He spat.

With that, he retreated to the woman’s side and Kjartan watched the couple hobble to their tent.

The next thing the chief of the Northern tribes knew was a sharp pain on the back of his head and he was down.

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Tikaya wrote a review Review · Aug 31

Well well well, after a slew of reviews which had no context, HI, girl with context here! =D

Hmmm is “gentlemen” already a word back then? It did take me out of the story for a bit…

I feel like you could do more work to set the scene. Reiterate some descriptions and some relations the characters have with each other. Something that tethers readers to the scene, makes it feel more alive.

It also feels like there is a lot of…. Upheaval in your scene where not very well described characters are sitting only to get up a second later, leaving only to take others with them… and that rly didn’t help with my immersion here. I think some of my problem is that you don’t really … give us reactions? Only actions.

Kjartan cringed at the mention of the gods,
Hmmm interesting!

I am still so nervous that Kjartan didn’t get to tell his ppl that he’s alright. It feels like a massive plot hole. Or disaster waiting to happen…

Uhhhh wait, the watch was…. IN the tent….?
I am so confused. Shouldn’t a nightwatch watch the…outside?

“I believe that you believe it.”
That is kinda a copout, isn’t it? Like, either she believes that Kjartan and his ppl DIDN’T do the deed---or she thinks they are delusional and forgot that they are murdering evildoers…?

If the Varakai attack again, we will not win this time.
Oh that is really good sentence and very ominous!!

I am also having trouble figuring out why one lone village is worth all this trouble? Clearly they lost a lot so maybe looking for allies elsewhere is the better course of action? I think you haven’t given me enough reason to believe that Kjartan will find something worth allying himself with, here? I mean, yes there maybe a handful of good fighters still alive, but it also sounded as if there weren’t THAT many ppl to begin with here? What really is the scale?

I like that he explains the ship travel thing to Eylin.

Ohhh I wonder if the mark he will show her has a slightly different design. I also like the history of his crest, that is very cool!

I think Ch8 has a stronger start since you do set the scene properly 😊

Wait so the mark is EXACTLY the same as the one around his neck? That… isn’t really helpful :/ I thought maybe if one design element were to be missing then… that could’ve been a clue?


“I heard the two of you talking this morning. I couldn’t sleep, so I stayed near the tent just in case. I drifted off soon after you left.”
Annnnnd he didn’t tell them that Eylin went with the northman…why?

I wish we would have had a bit of set up with Eero so this sudden murder attempt doesn’t come out of nowhere. (I mean you set up that the village is very hostile but you could have singled him out specifically?)

The man the boy spoke of relied on a staff to walk when he’d met him.
Ooookay…. Maybe,… I am just not remembering Eero? Right he was in the Eylin section where Kjartan was not present…

The woman smiled up at him, but Kjartan thought it looked more cunning than warm.
I like this phrasing.

He raised his sword, ready to plunge it through Eero’s heart, but the older man rolled away, retrieving his axe and bringing it down upon Kalman in a swing he tried to block but it still threw him off balance.

“You’re getting soft in your old age, Eero.” Kalman taunted, unable to contain his grin as he scrambled out of the axe’s reach. “Forfeit, man. I do not wish to kill you.”

Eero growled, lunging without hardly aiming. “Traitor!”
I think you mixed up names here? Otherwise I am so lost.

If this ended in his favor, every survivor in this meadow would be trying to kill them.
This would be a good idea to get your weapons and leave? What do you WANT from these people???
Ah excellent, he does just that. I like him :3

It would be dishonorable to leave now. We have to help
NO you need to get out of there and back to your SHIP who still have no idea what has gone down??? And then, when you have more people that have weapons, THEN you can consider helping these ppl D=

Arrgh WHY is no one thinking abt the ppl on the SHIP? They don’t know what’s going on!!!


Eylin didn’t know where Ironfist had gone, nor did she care. He was the last of anyone’s worries now. Her uncle was about to die.
Uhm if she doesn’t care why are we getting a section from her POV?

Hmmm I was very frustrated with this chapter XD
But that is an intriguing way to end it. Who managed to get this close to Kjartan? Was it the uncle, angered that the duel is interrupted?

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AllStarzz commented Comment · Aug 30

I love this story I didn’t read the previous chapters because I got this on green room but omg I love how descriptive you are. I can really see the relationship between the characters.

AmandaRose replied · Aug 31

Awww thank you so much!

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JacobMoor wrote a review Review · Aug 29

Hi, AmandaRose,
I really enjoyed the story – full confession, I haven’t gone back to read the preceding chapters just yet as I only recently saw these in the Green Room, but the chapters stand well on their own! I think your dialogue for the characters is quite strong throughout the story, and the characters’ interactions with one another work really well. You can write quite long conversations and still keep the reader invested, which is a damn useful skill.

I did notice your descriptive dialogue at the end of the direct speech relies a little bit heavily on verbs to convey mood and emotion like ‘growled’, which appeared a few times in the story, or ‘sighed’. In other places you do a really good job of conveying character interaction nonverbally, e.g. “her shoulders lifted in what he assumed was a shrug’ – I think if you rely more on these sorts of descriptions of movement, and in some cases dropping the descriptive to leave just the direct speech entirely, this might help you vary the dialogue and keep from needing to rely on good descriptive verbs that might otherwise get overused.

Also, this is less review here and more an observation on style. I've never read anything else by you yet, so this might only be true for this part of the story, but dialogue actually seems to form a VERY large part of your story. That's really cool! I feel like I've only seen quite rarely. Most 20-21st century writers are a little bit over-obsessed with the use of visuals, thankyou TV, but this story seems more driven by the auditory.

AmandaRose replied · Aug 30

Dialogue is something that used to give me a lot of trouble, so I truly appreciate hearing that my hard work has paid off in this area! Since this is still basically the beginning of the story, a fair bit of exposition is still technically happening, and so far dialogue has been the simplest way to do that...
Full disclosure of my own🫣: I do admit these are probably better quality than the preceding chapters, lol. Chapters 1-4 were written last year, and I feel like even in that short time, my writing style has changed quite a bit. I've been doing my best to fix it up as I go along but one can only do so much at once🥲

Also, to note on the dialogue tags/description, and whatnot, yes, I do plan on going through to fix that, and even decide on some certain habits/actions that are specific to each character to give them more personality, but at this stage of the rough draft I'm prioritizing actually getting more written than worrying about the line by line editing quite yet, although I do edit it pretty often because I always see things that could be changed, lol

Anyway, thank you so much for the compliments, and I hope you find the rest of it as enjoyable as this portion 😁

All the best



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