No name (again)

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My days hasn't been the best but feel free to comment.... Oh and please help me with a title!!


I’m not able to tell the president how to rule,
I can’t control how much a dog will drool.
I cannot tell a mockingbird to be real,
I can’t tell you how I truly feel….

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backwoodswriter Comment

Its good i liked it keep writing:)

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TaylaChase
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This is interesting. It is kind of short, though, so there's not really a lot for me to critique. Anyway, I like the way you list off things that you cannot do, to emphasize the fact that you can't tell the person how you feel. Anyway, there's really not much to say, so good job! I'm sorry I don't really have anything helpful to say, also I'm not very good at reviewing poetry, either. Anyway, I usually don't really like rhyming poems, because they sound too forced, but this one didn't seem to have that problem.
And, I'm not really a very creative person, so I'm sorry I can't really help with the name. I have issues coming up with names for my stories as well. Anyway, great work :D
~Tayla

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Jalmoc
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Jalmoc wrote a review · Fri Sep 30, 2011 4:35 pm

Hi again. Lol. Another one huh? This one isn't about questions but about how you can't do things... I think a good title would be Uncontrollable :) But once again that is just me. :)

I don't see anything wrong with the writing so A+! :D I wish I could get those more often. Lol. Well if you have any questions just feel free to PM me or something.

Keep On Writing!!!

--Jalmoc



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