Hi! Ineedy0u for a review here!
Just want to start off with I enjoy this poem, very well thought out. I thought that you did well to condense lots of feeling into this piece. It's hard to write a meaningful poem with such few lines, but you have succeeded! I liked how the poem ends, even though it isn't happy, because it ha feeling in it. Like you are sad to see them go, but it is for the best since you no longer have the feelings you once had. I see that they couldn't get along and this makes sense because like a lot of couples they have their differences, but this poem seems sad since they couldn't pull it together.
The only complaint I have is where you put punctuation, it seems as if they are placed randomly. I think I'd like to see them at the end of each stanza.
Anyway you are a very good poet, especially for 17. Keep up the great work!
I might be back for another review when you post another!
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