Published December 19, 2011
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Hi there, I liked this poem but found a couple comma use grammer errors -Look below.
You see, you capitalized after the comma it should be.
I tighten my coat around me, covering my bruises and scars. Hiding them from the world, and from myself.
I've seen this error through the whole poem. I suggest you re-read your work and edit to become better. Other then that nice job.
I really like this. It’s clear and to the point. Its not cryptic yet it still feels smooth and graceful like poetry should be. You really get the feel for the character and what he/she must be going through. Your character was abused and this topic written well or not is always moving. You are a lovely writer so this made the piece truly beautiful.
I seriously love this line. Mostly because i must have read it a billion times before i understood its meaning. Love itThis line is beautiful, it adds to your character. It shows how they have felt so much pain that they can’t feel it anymore, its wonderful. Although I loved it message I found the wording slightly broken. Try this,
the leaves crunched below my bare feet
Jagged rocks, broke through my skin, enough to make me bleed
Overall this was a great piece of writing and I can’t wait to see what else you have!