Published May 2, 2012
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Broaden yourself. This isn't a poem, this is something that people put on a little thing of plaster and hang in their kitchen walls when they don't know what else to do with the glaring, empty space. This doesn't carry original thought, humanity, or even emotion. This is an idea phrased another way (just barely, at that) and slapped with the label of a poem. If you want to write poetry, then delve into these ideas. Try looking at one of these phrases, and write a poem about THAT. Use imagery, use emotions, use your own experiences and sense of being in that writing and that will improve it.