I like how this doesn't really focus on their emotions at all, but that's the main thing you notice. It's like foreground-background and the poem itself is a background that you can only access the unwritten foreground through reading, then once you see it, it's clear. Beautiful. And even though it's free verse, it still sounds generally poetic to me through some sort of vague pattern in the lines (a lot of free verse ends up reading like prose to me and then I get irritated with it). So good work.
Points: 17
Reviews: 63
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