Hello, Alice. I haven't done a review in a long time, so I hope this one's up to standard.
I like this poem. One can tell that it is personal, and that you're actually talking about someone, and with genuine feeling. That's the impression that I got, anyway.
Firstly, I have to say that I liked it how you didn't try too hard to rhyme, and you didn't overdo it (like I do sometimes).
Secondly, the lines have varying numbers of syllables, and their stress seems to vary as well. I don't know if you did that on purpose, but at first I thought that it would signify the storm going on inside the narrator's mind. And then I thought: they say that they've grown up, so why would there be a storm? But then I realized that growing up and getting over things aren't the same thing, and things that happen can sometimes leave lasting scars and change a person permanently. So, I think that it's a good thing for the poem.
Anyway, that's for the structure. Now, for the content, again I thought something at first, but then I changed my mind about it. I thought that what was the point of saying that you've grown up and you're done if the person keeps figuratively surviving for you. But then I realized that this poem is in second person. It's about telling the person all of this. So, it's like the narrator is giving the person reasons why it's done and over with.
The narrator never specifies what this person has done, but just leaves it ambiguous for everyone, also implying that the person who inspired this poem would find themselves in it on their own. However, I think that it would leave a more lasting image if you gave an example for how this person is washed of shame, how you tried to "kill" them, or maybe what has made you believe that they don't care. It's just an idea and a personal opinion of mine.
Anyway, I think that this poem is relatable on two levels. Now, I can't speak for everyone, but I personally can identify with both the narrator and the person who is the object of the poem (let's call them Ashley, because it's a neutral name). I've felt like I've had people who just didn't seem to care and who I had trouble setting myself away from despite knowing that they're bad for me. But also, I've felt like Ashley as well, and I've been a jerk to people and I've said some pretty bad things that I didn't mean and that I deeply regret.
So, I think that this poem can teach people something, if they just pause to think about it. If you've got an Ashley in your life, you should try to distance yourself from them because they're bad for you. And if you realize that you are an Ashley, you should be happy that your friends are moving on and trying to be happy; and you should work on yourself to be a better person, because maybe one day your friends will want you back, but even if they don't, you'll be cool enough to make new ones and move on to happiness yourself.
I think that, in the end, if the poem has made you feel or think about things or reflect on who you are and what you're supposed to do, it's done a good job.
So, I hope that this review is satisfactory. Have a nice day!
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