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i liked the way you compare flower with yourself. I wad able to do imagine with your story.
Yes dreams can be act as wake up calls.
I feel like your writing is plain . Add some excitement .you can improve your writing if you add more information and more imagination .
you can explain how the waking up from the dream and going on the same road after having this horrible dream be possible.
if you want to convey the positive message you have to say it like he is changed now . The whole dream taught him lesson .he will not be as he was .
Also you yourself explain that flower was himself. Instead of that you wrote it like..
he woke up and start thinking. he felt like it was his life showing in front of him .
so try not write in simple way . make the audience think .just give some hint instead.
Points: 163
Reviews: 8
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