TECHY. What comes to your mind when you hear the word “Techy”? Do you think it even exists in the dictionary? According to Urban dictionary, it is someone who has a particular affinity and/or obsession with technology. We now live in a world full of technology. Technology involves the design and production of innovative and creative products to meet the needs and wants of others. Many people see technology as a solution to some of the problems that exist in our planet. It’s true that technology can be used for good, but with new developments come new challenge issues. Technology is associated with innovation. It involves the transformation of ideas into something useful. In fact, there are various breakthroughs in different fields. Technology has made our life easier with its new innovations that are making a vast change in our world. These innovations draw on a range of fields including medicine, agriculture and transportation.
Modern technological inventions in the field of medicine have revolutionized the way medical practitioners check and treat their patients. Through technological breakthroughs, the world has discovered various cures and preventive vaccines and medicines for specific diseases. One of these is the anti-bleeding gel that instantly seals a wound and starts the clotting process which creates a synthetic framework that mimics the extra-cellular matrix that helps the body grow together (Landolina, Miller 2013). Also, we now have this pollen vaccine that is efficient, painless, can be self-administered and can induce both systemic and mucosal immune responses, which enhance protection. This vaccine protects against a range of infectious diseases that is more easily administered and more easily transported for deployed troops (Gill, 2013). In addition, there is this magnetic levitation that creates realistic human tissue using nano-magnets that allowed lab-grown tissue to levitate above a nutrient solution (Souza, 2013). New discoveries like these could vastly change the way medication can be given to humans.
The enormous progress in technology is responsible for the great forward revolution in the field of agriculture. The technological advances have touched the field of agriculture. We now have various innovations in this field that helps farmers to improve their crops and grains. One of these innovations is the Telematics that is a program that allows navigation, prescription application, location and other data to be transferred easily to and from farm machinery. This system helps farmers improve efficiencies on high-priced equipment and simplify the transfer of field data such as A/B lines, spraying prescriptions and real-time yields to and from tractors and sprayers (Deere, AGCO 2013). Moreover, we have this nitrogen utilizing machine that produces the same amount of corn with less applied nitrogen or improved yield with the same amount of nitrogen. This reduces the amount of nitrogen fertilizer that is lost by farmers every year due to leaching into the air, soil and waterways (Nielsen, 2013). In addition, there is this soil and crop sensor that can read everything from plant health and water needs in the crop to nitrogen levels in the soil and helps optimize water use and avoid yield loss (Adamchuk, 2013). Discoveries of technological innovations have meant that there’s greater productivity and prosperity in the field of Agriculture.
Advances in technology play a key role in shaping transportation systems, which in turn helps to shape our lives, landscapes, and culture. Technology has affected society and transportation in number of ways. We now have this giant inflatable airship that runs on algae – latest bio-fuel that can be developed from brackish and waste water can hover over an area for up to 7 days continuously which gives it an edge as an aerial watch dog. This airship is utilized for uses as diverse as sightseeing, carrying heavy loads, as near-space satellite for broadcasting communications, weather watch, and geophysical surveying and monitoring any untoward events like oil spills (Judd, 2010). Furthermore, we have this solar boat that is provided 38,000 black photovoltaic cells and solar panels to generate power in environmentally friendly way. It is completely powered by the sun so it produces no emissions of carbon dioxide or other gases that could contaminate air samples (Jurgens, 2010). As for the future, who knows what technology holds. Technology will continue to change transportation and transportation will continue to change our lives.
The technologies available to people greatly influence how their lives are as well as people have influence on technology’s development and how it is used. New conceptual breakthroughs are invariably driven by the development of new technologies. The new technologies, in turn, inspire technologists to invent things, not sometimes because they dream of having their capabilities, but many times simply because they can build them. In other words, grand conceptual inventions happen because technology has finally made them possible. However, people should take advantage of the technology advances and use it wisely in benefit to their lives. If we gaze into the future, we can see the beginnings of a whole new world of technology that the humans of yesterday couldn't even begin to imagine. In many ways, technology’s new discoveries simplify life, and have many beneficial effects to the community.
References:
AGCO (AgCommand and AgCommand Advanced) (September, 2013). 20 technologies changing agriculture. Retrieved from http://m.farmindustrynews.com/precision-farming/20-technologies-changing-agriculture#slide-2-field_images-45641
Bob Nielsen (September, 2013). 20 technologies changing agriculture. Retrieved from http://m.farmindustrynews.com/precision-farming/20-technologies-changing-agriculture#slide-3-field_images-45641
Captain Allan Judd (June 1, 2013). Giant Inflatable Airship Powered by Algae. Retrieved from http://www.alternative-energy-news.info/giant-inflatable-airship-powered-by-algae/
Glauco Souza (March 22, 2013). 10 Medical Technologies That Could Shape The Future. Retrieved from http://listverse.com/2013/03/22/10-medical-technologies-that-could-shape-the-future/
Harvinder Gill of Texas Tech University (March 22, 2013). 10 Medical Technologies That Could Shape The Future. Retrieved from http://listverse.com/2013/03/22/10-medical-technologies-that-could-shape-the-future/
Isaac Miller (March 22, 2013). 10 Medical Technologies That Could Shape The Future. Retrieved from http://listverse.com/2013/03/22/10-medical-technologies-that-could-shape-the-future/
Joe Landolina (March 22, 2013). 10 Medical Technologies That Could Shape The Future. Retrieved from http://listverse.com/2013/03/22/10-medical-technologies-that-could-shape-the-future/
John Deere (September, 2013). 20 technologies changing agriculture. Retrieved from http://m.farmindustrynews.com/precision-farming/20-technologies-changing-agriculture#slide-2-field_images-45641
Jorn Jurgens (March 4, 2010). World’s Largest Solar Boat Prepares for World Tour. Retrieved from http://www.alternative-energy-news.info/worlds-largest-solar-boat-world-tour/
Viacheslav Adamchuk (September, 2013). 20 technologies changing agriculture. Retrieved from http://m.farmindustrynews.com/precision-farming/20-technologies-changing-agriculture#slide-10-field_images-45641
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Hi there Aira and welcome to YWS! You've gotten some great feedback already, so I'll keep this short.
Overall, I like how you focus on new technologies and how they can change our world. It shows that though a lot of innovation has happened already, there is still more to come.
Opening with a question is good for getting the reader thinking, but Urban Dictionary isn't the best source. Anyone can make a definition for it so it's not the most trustworthy. Plus it has a lot of non-school-appropriate content. Here's a more reputable dictionary defining "techie": http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/techie
In addition, this opening seems unrelated to your essay at large. Perhaps a better opening question might be "How has technology changed the way we live?" or "What technologies make our lives better than 50 or 100 years ago?"
Overall, this is a well structured essay. Keep writing!
You requested me to review, but I don't think I can. I thinks it great the way it is. You made lots of valid points, showed your opinion without the facts getting muddled in the process and you used references. It was also a nice read. I think it's fine the way it is
Guurrl that's a loot of likes! Do you even need me to tell you how awesome this is?
Keep it up!
i've learned a lot from your article!
job well done!
Wow, this was really good! You seemed to know what you were talking about and you were very thorough. Good luck, and keep writing!
Hey Aria,
Pen here with a review
First of all, great hook. The hook is one of the most important parts of an essay, and you nailed it.
Now, to skip to the end. Please, never begin your concluding paragraph with "In conclusion'. It is overused and not very creative at all. Just omit the 'in conclusion' at the beginning. It will still make sense and it will make the paper seem much more creative. With the 'in conclusion', it seems like you just cut-and-pasted information into a middle-school paper outline. Without it, it will make your paper seem much more thought out and mature. (I know this seems trivial and that it won't do much, but it really changes the feeling of the whole essay)
Also, try to vary how you include the source material in your quotes. or example, you can put the source name in front of the quote, like According to____, "______" () or put the whole source material in parenthesis and just put the quote itself with the source as an in-text citation. Also, just try to vary word choices. Instead of putting 'according' after each, try 'says' or 'explains' or any other word you can think of that would fit.
Overall, it was a very informative and interesting essay. With just a little bit of tweaking, it will be a great one. It was definitely interesting and I can't wait to see more!
~Pen
Thank you for the review.
Learned a lot from it! I'm working on my errors now. 
Thanks again. 
Hey,
You see this below, that is very good to include in an essay.
References:
AGCO (AgCommand and AgCommand Advanced) (September, 2013). 20 technologies changing agriculture. Retrieved from http://m.farmindustrynews.com/precision ... ages-45641
Bob Nielsen (September, 2013). 20 technologies changing agriculture. Retrieved from http://m.farmindustrynews.com/precision ... ages-45641
Captain Allan Judd (June 1, 2013). Giant Inflatable Airship Powered by Algae. Retrieved from http://www.alternative-energy-news.info ... -by-algae/
Glauco Souza (March 22, 2013). 10 Medical Technologies That Could Shape The Future. Retrieved from http://listverse.com/2013/03/22/10-medi ... he-future/
Harvinder Gill of Texas Tech University (March 22, 2013). 10 Medical Technologies That Could Shape The Future. Retrieved from http://listverse.com/2013/03/22/10-medi ... he-future/
Isaac Miller (March 22, 2013). 10 Medical Technologies That Could Shape The Future. Retrieved from http://listverse.com/2013/03/22/10-medi ... he-future/
Joe Landolina (March 22, 2013). 10 Medical Technologies That Could Shape The Future. Retrieved from http://listverse.com/2013/03/22/10-medi ... he-future/
John Deere (September, 2013). 20 technologies changing agriculture. Retrieved from http://m.farmindustrynews.com/precision ... ages-45641
Jorn Jurgens (March 4, 2010). World’s Largest Solar Boat Prepares for World Tour. Retrieved from http://www.alternative-energy-news.info ... orld-tour/
Viacheslav Adamchuk (September, 2013). 20 technologies changing agriculture. Retrieved from http://m.farmindustrynews.com/precision ... ages-45641
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Ok so yes i agree with other people on here it is ineed of corrections. But it makes a very valid point, good job!
Your article is informative, and in my opinion you have successfully presented your readers with complete ideas that are concise and up to date.
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However, there are a few things you might have overlooked:
1. Do not limit yourself from using other transitional words of phrases.
2. Check your subject and verb agreement.
3. Avoid citation redundancy. You can use a different type of citation approach such as (example, 2013) or incorporate your sources in the text like "According to example, (2013).."
4. Remove unnecessary sentences some of these are: "We now live in a world full of technology." "The technological advances have touched the field of agriculture." and etc. (These sentences just crowd your paragraph and are actually facts. Most people know these things already.
5. Since your article is mostly a research, it would preferably be better if you do not use contractions. (e.g. "there's, don't")
6. Avoid run-on sentences, but do not use excessive periods as well. It would be best if you cut your long sentences into meaningful chunks by using conjunctions and semi-colons as well.
7. Try using books. I have noticed that much of your references were just from the internet.
Overall, I think your article was really good.
The essay you've done was great but some little corrections. But in all it is nice and interesting.
I didn't saw major mistakes with your work. I like it! Your article is very informative and when someone read this, he/she will really get additional information with those new discoveries. I like the way you write it and the way you organize the details. Keep up the good work! It was nice!
You have a point on your essay. Keep up the good work!
Catchy one
A great help especially for student like me 
Hi AiraPatricia,DK here with review on your informative essay.
This is a good start in your essay. It is served with unpretentious writing style, but very convincing.Just one thing, no need to put the cross there because you're writing 'or' there.However,same with most Essays, the paragraph at the beginning is too long and makes the focus on the opening of this essay affected.You should continue to focus on the things that you will provide on the contents of this essay without having twisted explained the matter that is already known.
Turning to the important points, you have divided the role of technology in medicine, agriculture and transportation.Your explanations are really effective and good. It is easy to understand and successfully deliver important messages to the reader.Good job!
I like the ending too.It is a broader view and a perfect conclusion to a good essay.
Bit tips on word choice.
#the soil and also*(Try: "and") helps optimize water use and avoid yield loss according to an article by Adamchuk (2013).
# The new technologies, in turn, inspire technologists to invent things, not sometimes because they themselves*(Try: They) dream
*Reason?->You should avoid redundant expressions when possible. A redundant expression has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase. By eliminating redundant expressions you will make your writing more clear and concise.
Good job,keep it up!
kudos,cheers.
Thank you for the review.
Helped me a lot! :3 I already corrected my errors. 
And I will avoid using redundant expressions next time. Learned a lot from you! Thanks again 
My pleasure,young lad'
I love it. You've made an excellent essay. Job well done.
Nice, Essay. Like it
Very well said. Nice article huh, keep up the good work.
Nice essay.
Heyy AiraPatricia! Here is SapphireFlames for the review!
This is my second review for the day and again comes Technology!
So anyway let me get to the article.
Its again a very informative article and the way you have explained all the uses of technology and its format is also very good and well written for the readers to enjoy reading!
I also liked the bibliography part at the end of your piece and looks like you have researched a lot for this
now let me to parts that I liked about you work!
"TECHY" what comes to you mind when you hear the word "Techy"? do you it exist in the dictionary?" Its good.
I liked the end part (conclusion)
"In conclusion, the technologies available to people greatly influence how their lives are as well as people have influence on technology’s development and how it is used. New conceptual breakthroughs are invariably driven by the development of new technologies. The new technologies, in turn, inspire technologists to invent things, not sometimes because they themselves dream of having their capabilities, but many times simply because they can build them. In other words, grand conceptual inventions happen because technology has finally made them possible. However, people should take advantage of the technology advances and use it wisely in benefit to their lives. If we gaze into the future, we can see the beginnings of a whole new world of technology that the humans of yesterday couldn't even begin to imagine. In many ways, technology’s new discoveries simplify life, and have many beneficial effects to the community. "
and so: '' Technology has made our life easier with its new innovations that are making a vast change in our world''.
Anyway its a good piece and well written.
Keep it up!
Keep writing!
FuturAuthor,
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Hey there! I'm Onyx, I will be reviewing your article today!
Great job to you on that! Now a few things I would like to point out, of course you do not have to use any of these to change your article. This is just my opinions and you can just leave it the way you see fit. 
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I really like it, it is very interesting! You did a wonderful job describing the different ways technology is used throughout the world. Very good job in keeping me interested! To be honest, articles are not something I normally read unless they are very interesting.
Great hook! I thought that was very interesting!
Don't know if it is just me or what but this doesn't sound right when I read over it. Maybe change "challenges" to "challenge" and leave "issues" as it is. It could just be me, I'm weird. Ha-
Great topic sentence! That clearly states and explains what the paragraph will lead into. Great job.
Nothing big but there should be a space right here.
If you are stating something that someone says, I would put it in quotations. That way the audience or reader knows that is the exact words the person has said about it. Also, if you were to make a change in someones statement, put [ ] around the letter or addition to the word that you have changed. It gives the audience or reader a notation that you changed the statement to fit the structure of your sentence.
Same thing here, add some quotations to show what is being stated.
For some reason this sounds weird to me. Maybe change the wording a bit to make it sound like it fits together?
Here I think the word "help" should be "helps" or "helped" Just leaving it as "help" sounds a little different.
Of course, just here add a space between the comma and "is" Nothing major.
Over all
Amazing job! I like how I was interested throughout the article, not once did I get bored! You do use a lot of ethos, I would have liked to see some more logos or maybe even a bit of pathos in there. It just gives you a little more of an edge on your article while using those. Again to recap on a few of my comments. Make sure you use quotations to show what a person is stating, that way the audience knows. I love how you cited your sources! That is always a good thing to have in there so anyone can go back and see for themselves. If you have any questions about why I made what change or why I said something. Feel free to send me a message and we can talk it out! I can't wait to read some more from you and if you ever need any reviews. Send them my way! Thank you for your time,
~Onyx
Hi Onyx! I would like to thank you for all the help you've given me.
I really appreciate it a lot. Sorry for my errors 
will work on them as soon as I can. I am really thankful for your review. 
I like your hook ! Nice Job ..
Wow, you have improved in your writing skills.The beginning hooked me up easily and there are so many helpful technologies/inventions that I don't even know. I thought mankind was focusing more on our personal interests like gadgets but this prove me wrong. I admire how you put all those references for additional information purposes. Overall, the essay was great just needs a little more polishing.
it is true that technology has a great impact on our lives especially for those who are experiencing the technological atmosphere while living in this world. A great essay of yours, Aira.
Very detailed and interesting! goodwork Ms. Malabanan
Thats Nice
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nice hook and great essay.
Okay.
This was very interesting to read. I'm very interested in the subject and I'm guessing this was a report for school. If it is for school then I recommend that you make some changes to your references. Change it into MLA format on a works cited page. If MLA is confusing go to Perdue OWL. It's a great way to figure out how to do it.
Your grammar is a little choppy. You should indent every paragraph. In the first paragraph you forgot some spaces in between words. "These innovations draw on a range of fieldsincluding the medicine, agriculture and transportation." You need a spacing in between "fields" and "including". I don't understand why you put "the" in front of medicine. There are more mistakes like this throughout the work. I would recommend double checking it. If it helps try printing it out and circling all of the mistakes.
Also, your word choice isn't very good. You seem to repeat some of the same books. Try using a thesaurus. If you don't have one there's one on reference.com that is excellent. The structure of the essay it's self is good. You have a strong essay, but it could use a lot of tweaking.
Some of the same words* my goodness I don't know how that happened.
thesaurus*
Maybe I need to proofread my reviews more carefully. Haha.
Thank you so much for your comment.
It really helped me a lot. I will work on my errors as soon as I can. I'm sorry, it was my first time to write an essay. And yes, this was a report for school. But thanks again. 
Wow! For your first time it's extremely well put together! I'm glad I could help you on it.
I love the content of your essay
The first word is very interesting. Nice work
Nice one. I like your essay. Keep up the good work.