Kali - Prologue

....ok. So you're setting up the story, which is good. It's a bit odd, to me, to give the dad the name "Hell Raiser" right off the bat. That sort of name is usually given because of fighting, and it's not normally the type of name a girl associates with her dad, even if everyone else calls him that.

You've packed so, so much into three paragraphs. It's a lot of information in a tiny space, so it's a bit hard to absorb. Maybe try to expand on Kali's life--describe what it's like for her to live with her parents. Tell us how Hell Raiser got his name, why Kali would think of him as Hell Raiser, or what she calls him if he doesn't. What's his real name? Why does he need a name at this point? You never gave the mother a name, not that we can see. So why is dad called "Hell Raiser" twice while the mom is just Mother?

Where was the king-sized bed? Was it in her parents' room? Why was Kali in there? Did she have a nightmare? Was it daytime? Nighttime? What was her father doing, that he wasn't there with her at the time?

The fact that the blood's still oozing out actually annoys me slightly, because if that's the case, she was killed only a few seconds--a few minutes, tops--before. The heart stops pumping when you're dead, so the blood stops flowing, and unless you make a new cut or something, the blood will still clot and stop flowing (unless there's something very wrong with the person).

One nitpick:

The day Kali turned 13, she found her mother, murdered on the glorious king-sized bed soaked in her Mother's blood

(I forgot how to do colors, so I just bolded my correction. ^_^;)
The bed belongs to mother, and mother is singular, so Mother's needs an apostrophe. If you were saying she had many mothers, you could leave it out, but that's the only case I can think of for this word.

So, in general, I think this is a good start, but it needs a lot of work and a lot of refining. Don't worry too much, though--it's just part of the writing process. You'll get better as you write more and more.