Young Writers Society

King here

I can not really say a lots for this, mostly because I am no good with lyrics and the shortest types of writings and also because I think the work is too short to have something so long to tell about it.

I tried to sing this in very different ways and tones, maybe changed the speed of how I read the lines also but times to times it was not flowing very well. I am not a pro into writing this specific 'way' but I think it needs the double check. Anyways, you are new so before I forget what I needed to start this very short review with, welcome to YWS and hope you improve and like it here. Everyone is different so we expect to see something different each time someone new posts their first work, this way we understand a bit about the author and their own style.

I hope to see more of you and your improvement. I do not know if you will be writing only lyrics which I do not review but maybe I need a bit of a change also.

Before I end the review, the fourth line has a bit of a mistake. Payed needs to be paid.

Oooh. Short but sweet! Because of the brevity, I don't have much to say, but I'll try. I like that this song doesn't have to be any longer than it already is. Short songs are hard to do right. However, the word "payed" should be spelled "paid". I would also put a question mark after "What is this all for". That's all I have. Nice little song!