My Dense Eyes Feel Like Thier Bleeding
But Now I Gotta Start Believing
Cause Now I'm Sittin Back
Lights Low Listening To Joe Budden Who is Pure Inspiration
With Immense Creation Of Aggression Turned into a Powerful Emotion
My Mind Feels Alive,Teasing Me To Write It's Own Piece
Calling For Skill And Devotion
The Day He Pushed Down That Handle To Open Space For Us Why Did It Become Such a Dangle?
My Brain Feels like It's Dismantled With All The Numerous Visons Making Me Feel Mentally Trampled,
Now Have You Ever Seen A Girl Who U Think Is Your World
But Really
She Switches Into a Witch
Which Makes U Feel Ur Robitic
And You've Got a Glitch.
But Walk With Me and Take A Stroll
While I Stop Beatin Around The Bush And Start Getting Fully In Control
In My Mindset Things Are Not Always Sunny
Now That's Kind Of Funny
Cause Lies Can Make You Forget The Truth Which can Make
Me Feel To Stop This Verse
But F***That I Just Assess The Whole Situation And Picture It Being Worse
And I'm Told That When It Comes
To Girls If Ur Beating Then Ur Succeeding
And That's Quite Teasing Cause the Deep Breathing Is Pleasing
But All That Is Resisted I Don't Wanna See A Person In Me That I Didn't Know Existed
But I'm Blistered With All These Thoughts Becoming Vague Pictures
I'm Writing This Down Believing That This Is My Personal Scripture
Which Makes More Sense Every time I Pour Words In This Pad
Call It My Expressive Liquor
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Hmmm.... intriguing.... *wiggles brows* This was a very interesting poem. Very different, and it had a really unique style. One mispelled word in the beginning, and please don't write things like ur instead of your/you are, or u instead of you. That's just annoying. This is a writer's forum, after all. Anyway, great job! Hope I wasn't too harsh.
*hopeful cheesy grin*
Great poem, but what I didn't understand is Why exactly you capitalized every word. I get it if you're trying to add emphasis, though thats not the 'correct' way to do it, but capitalizing every word is just... I don't know, very different. Overall a nice solid poem. =]