String Of Hate And Lies

I liked it, a lot, however, several things for your notice:

"People say it's plain to see,
People say it's clear.
That if you just run away
I would just disappear."

The just is not only not required, but ruins the weight of your rhyme.

"You love me but you hate me,
said without me you'd be dead.
But I'd be the death of you,
with all the thing's I've said."

A bit unclear, Did the other person said- 'but I'd be the death of you' or is it a statement of the narrator.
also, the metaphors and ideas here are a bit cheesy.

"You know this won't make any sense
I might misunderstand.
But still you said,
"Please never leave me,
I hope you understand."

Using as a rhyme- 'understand' and 'misunderstand' is just lazy.

There are some grammatical errors here and there, and problematic structures as well, but I lack the patience and the grammar to actually point them out and correct them.

Aside from that I liked the poem, it's simple- yet very complex. I can understand the emotions and situation easily, anyone can, but it remains complicated.

You should work a bit on some things, but I think you have the talent, all it needs is a bit of carving.

Waiting for the next poem.

Haha go easy on me! I"m just rookie.
But yeah the next one would much better. Thanks for the comment's by the way. Helps me a lot. The poem just a simple, clumsy piece of work. I'll use your idea's for the next poem. Tell me how you like it. =)

Aadesh wrote:
You kneel on the floor,
tears falling from your eyes. It's 'tears' otherwise it would become 'tear is', just like 'it's' becomes 'it is', and 'tear is' makes no sense.
You've learnt to hate me
along with all my lies.

Then why do you still love me? So in the last stanza you state that this person has 'learnt to hate you' so why does he/she still love you? Is this supposed to be ironic? Also, take out the 'then'.
Why are you still here?
When I've broken you,
and still not shed a tear You've not shed a tear even after breaking this person? Try rewording this so it's less confusing. Maybe "After I've broken you, and still I've shed no tear."

People say it's plain to see;
People say it's clear.
That if you just run away
I would just disappear. 'Just' really sounds awkward in this line, maybe because you already used it recently. "Simply", for example, would sound a lot better.

But nothing was ever simple; Uh, 'nothing's' should just be 'nothing.'
there's nothing clear to see.
You could never run away,
for you were once so dear to me. This seemed almost like it had too many syllables..

You love me but you hate me - Or (;)
said 'without me you'd be dead.' Put this in italics or as I leave as I fixed it.
But I'd be the death of you, Shouldn't 'I'd' be changed to "I'll"? Also, there doesn't need to be a comma at the end of this line.
with all the thing's I've said.

You know this won't make any sense;
I might misunderstand. Line is too short as well as the next one.
But still you said,
"Please never leave me,
I hope you understand." Understand what?