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"Love", an Excerpt from "The Blitman Anthology"

by ABlitman


Love is a noun. Love is a verb. Love is a condition. Yet it is unconditional. It is something as abstract and unknowable as it is concrete. It is a duality that equally shapes and destroys. It means everything to everyone, even those to whom it means nothing.

Love is a force that shapes the universe. It has the power to unite beings of all sorts. It can cross boundaries of gender, race, and species, sometimes simultaneously. It is the thing that drives music—the one reason why songs are sung in the first place. It inspired self-expression and all that is creative in human civilization. All of the feats of humanity are tied to a desire. But, what desire? The desire for love from something earthly or something divine is the root of achievement.

A man’s love can move mountains. A woman’s love can shape the world. Divine love can define the universe, for an individual or an entire civilization. Religions revolve around it. Philosophies question it. Philosophies also affirm it. They also try to define it. Can you?

Love is the beacon of hope for all of humankind. I say this because I know what it is, or have at least done enough internal digging to derive a definition for it. To me, this is the definition of love:

“The authentic, unconditional, unwavering, undying attraction to, appreciation for, and dedication toward another’s existence and well-being.”

True love is such a heavy investment that its acceptance and rejection has come to define me. It has also shaped you, without regard to your knowledge of the matter. I’m sure others have created definitions for the word, but I find this one the most encompassing answer to the problems of love.

When love works (is reciprocated), the stars around you align in your favor. When the magic fades, the stars scatter beyond your limits. Love can destroy us. It is important to be aware of the balance required to maintain love throughout your lifetime. And, even more importantly, maintain stability for the sake of future generations. Every child is a lovechild as much as (s)he is a brainchild. Without love, there is no future and there are no children. That is the purpose of love.

Love is what completes us, whether we find it within ourselves or with the help of others. It is a gift of sentiment that creates feelings that cannot be described by words alone. Though we may delve deep inside our souls to scrape the very essence of our being to the surface for the world to see, all the delving in the world is worthless without someone to refill us with something better—a heightened awareness of all that’s beautiful in ourselves and in our world.

Let love reign o’er me, you, and everyone and everything else. May the force of love grant you enchantment for the rest of your time on Earth and beyond as I wish you good night! Live long and prosper.


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Sun Feb 15, 2015 11:34 pm
Morrigan wrote a review...



Hello!

Love is hard to define. You've taken quite a valiant stab at it, but really, how can you define love in an itty bitty excerpt?

The thing about this is that it's wordy. It's about love, yes, but really, other than angsty teenagers and people dealing with weddings/breakups/first dates, who is going to be interested enough in a philosophical definition of love to plow through something as wordy as this? If you're going to go deep, you'd best let the readers wade in first. I suggest something concrete, like an anecdote or something.

You don't mention self love in here. Self love is just as important as the love for others. In the bolded definition, you specifically say "for others." I'd like to see an address of the love for oneself. It might be addressed outside of the excerpt, but I'd like to see a hint of that.

When love works (is reciprocated),
If you're going to say "is reciprocated" in parenthesis, why don't you just take out "works" and leave it as "is reciprocated?"

What makes you an expert on love? I'm not saying this to be rude. Readers will listen to a reputable source before an unknown one. Prove to the readers that you are a reputable source, and this whole thing will be more believable.

I hope that this review proves useful to you! Happy YWSing!




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Sun Feb 15, 2015 7:35 pm
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That was really, really cool. Live long and prosper to you too. I have never seen anyone go that crazy deep with that subject. This was very well done, and I enjoyed it very much. One teensy thing you need to work on is going a bit more in depth with your ideas, like one or two sentences instead of just bambambambam,you tend to jump from notion to notion a bit quickly. All I have to say. This is written with the factuality of a thesis, but also with the emotion of a poem. I especially enjoyed the closing paragraph, which was very poetic and well done. Awesome job! :)





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