Published December 13, 2009
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That was really beautiful, and rife with imagery. I'm sure your friend would be proud of this piece. It was, obviously, full of depression and melancholy but they felt like new emotions when approached from this angle.
I hope that made some sense to you. Sorry if this is a pointless review.
great job.
Empress
Wow, that is very good. I didn't find anything wrong with this, but Hey, that's just on me. Nice job you did.
I like this poem. It is full of vivid imagery and emotion.
I think adding "the" to both of these lines makes it flow better.
I really like this stanza and I can totally relate. A friend of mine also died recently and it was writing about it that got me through the grieving process. Good job and keep writing