with you

This is extremely simple, but very nice. Who has time for a long poetical poem, anyway? I really like how you made this short and sweet, and I wish I could see more poems like this. It cuts right to the point in a rather simple but beautiful way. I feel like it expresses the definition of love and what people would like to find in it. Very enjoyable, good job!

Hello.

This is a simplistic poem with an interesting structure. As other reviewers have said, some of the punctuation could be revised, unless you intentionally formed it that way, but I don't see the purpose of that. The theme is one of longing and love, something very prevalent in poetry. This poem seems like it's very personal to you.

I don't really understand the line "I will always wait for you deep inside the sea". Unless this is a Jack and Rose Titanic situation and somebody drowned in the ocean, but it doesn't seem that way. It seems like you just needed a rhyming word. However I do like how you calculated where to put what words. It adds to the emotional effect. For example, the last line is just "with me", I think that was a good decision because it leaves the audience with a sense of longing and emptiness, while allowing for a miniscule amount of hope to take hold.

Hi! The structure of this poem is very simplistic but sharply conveys your message of always being with someone,(no matter where they are) remaining loyal and wanting them to be forever by your side. You have emphasised your message by repeating 'always' which sticks in your mind after reading this poem. Your poem is very rhythmic and flows which personally makes it nice to read. I do agree with the other comment about capitalizing and would also add that you could develop: 'deep inside the sea.' Although this rhymes with 'be,' the meaning isn't that clear to me, as a reader. However I really enjoyed reading this sweet poem and I love the strong message. Keep writing and I hope to read more of your work!

Hey! Tigerlilly here for a review!

I just wanted to say that this was an excellent poem and I enjoyed it greatly. Though there are, in fact, a few problems.

First off, I know that punctuation does not need to be used, because this is poetry, but I wanted to say that it gets on my nerves when people don't capitalize the beginning of each line. If its your preference to have them lowercase, that's fine. This is just my personal opinion.

I also thought it was an interesting structure to the poem, just the way it looked overall. It wasn't bad or good, it was just interesting to me.

My favorite line would have to be the first two, because I find that true. No matter what, that person is always in your heart and in your mind, even if your miles away.

I really liked this! Keep writing and I look forward to reading more of your work!