I'm sorry if I live in the USA.
p.s.-sorry. Again.
“Nick,” said Colin, “why don’t you go and distract the dinosaurs while we try to find the time machine?”
“But I can’t do that,” Nick replied, “I’m too short. Mr Frigid and I will look for the time machine while you go and distract the dinosaurs. You know about them more than me so you will know how to keep them at bay.”
“Fine, I’ll go and do it right now.” And with that, he dashed off.
Mr Frigid had a strange look on his face.
“Come on Mr Frigid, we’ve got to look for the time machine, by the way, what happened with the time machine that got us ending up in the dinosaur times?”
“Oh,” said Mr Frigid, “That. Well, I did tell you there was a flaw with the machine didn’t I? Well I made it and there was a mistake with some of the buttons. That explains it.”
Nick says, “Ah, no it doesn’t, you didn’t tell us anything about a fault in the time machine, you just told us to come and check it out.”
Mr Frigid knitted his eyebrows. “Well I don’t care, I just made it I wouldn’t know how to fix it just because I made it. And anyway why is Colin being engulfed by the dinosaurs?”
“What?” Nick asked, looking to the direction Colin went. He saw two dinosaurs surrounding him, preparing to paralyse him. “Quick, let’s go there and help him, forget about the time machine for now, just get Colin.”
They scuttled over to Colin promptly. Mr Frigid found a near rock that weighed very bulky and thrust it at the T-Rex. It rammed into the T-Rex’s rear and it growled with soreness. It headed towards Mr Frigid and the other T-rex was engrossed in Nick’s stopwatch.
“Keep on doing that, and then we’ll leg it.”
To be Continued...
No you person you said paralysed is spelt wrong? Well it isn't, 'paralyse' is the English spelling and probably you are in USA but they have much better in England
Before I'm going to say anything, I would like to say (or shout) PUNCTUATION. ok there, I am done. I know some books (I only know one) does not have a period after Mr., please please please change it to Mr. Frigid instead of Mr Frigid.
“But I can’t do that,” Nick replied, “I’m too short....
Mr Frigid knitted his eyebrows. “Well I don’t care, I just made it I wouldn’t know how to fix it just because I made it. And anyway why is Colin being engulfed by the dinosaurs?”
“What?” Nick asked, looking to the direction Colin went. He saw two dinosaurs surrounding him, preparing to paralyse him. “Quick, let’s go there and help him, forget about the time machine for now, just get Colin.”
They scuttled over to Colin promptly. Mr Frigid found a near rock that weighed very bulky and thrust it at the T-Rex. It rammed into the T-Rex’s rear and it growled with soreness. It headed towards Mr Frigid and the other T-rex was engrossed in Nick’s stopwatch.
“Keep on doing that, and then we’ll leg it.”
First off
Very good.
“Fine, I’ll go and do it right now.” And with that, he dashed off.
“Come on Mr Frigid, we’ve got to look for the time machine, by the way, what happened with the time machine that got us ending up in the dinosaur times?”
Nick says, “Ah, no it doesn’t, you didn’t tell us anything about a fault in the time machine, you just told us to come and check it out.”
Mr Frigid knitted his eyebrows. “Well I don’t care, I just made it I wouldn’t know how to fix it just because I made it. And anyway why is Colin being engulfed by the dinosaurs?”
He built the machine, so he should know everything about it. You state that he made the machine too many times, its clear that he built it. Also, 'engulfed' doesn't sound like the right word to use, try 'Looks like Colin doesn't know as much as you said he does, he's going to be eaten alive if we don't help.'“What?” Nick asked, looking to the direction Colin went. He saw two dinosaurs surrounding him, preparing to paralyse him. “Quick, let’s go there and help him, forget about the time machine for now, just get Colin.”
They scuttled over to Colin promptly. Mr Frigid found a near rock that weighed very bulky and thrust it at the T-Rex. It rammed into the T-Rex’s rear and it growled with soreness. It headed towards Mr Frigid and the other T-rex was engrossed in Nick’s stopwatch.
“Keep on doing that, and then we’ll leg it.”
Enzoguy15
Very good.
"Fine, I'll go and do it right now." And with that, he dashed off.
"Come on Mr Frigid, we've got to look for the time machine, by the way, what happened with the time machine that got us ending up in the dinosaur times?"
"Ah, no it doesn't
you didn't tell us anything about a fault in the time machine,
"Well I don't care, I just made it I wouldn't know how to fix it just because I made it. And anyway why is Colin being engulfed by the dinosaurs?"
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