Hey, this was probably meant to be put in the storybooks section of the website, but I figured a little reviewing of it couldn't hurt anyway, right? So I'll give you my impressions and questions.
The first impression I had, especially because of the piece of paper with the note on it flying perfectly in front of the character's face, was that of a video game. It felt like the opening sequence to a video game, written out instead of animated in front of us. That said, the rest of the opening was a little too vague to work. The world turning black and the world erupting again? What does black mean? All in shadow, or all completely gone from your senses? What does erupt mean? Come back into life from stillness or burn with fire? It's not exactly clear what's going on, and that doesn't let the reader (or potential story-booker) get into the idea of the story right away.
Next, be sure you proofread everything! It's important even in story books, to set a good impression for possible future members.
As you approach a large building the road falls into the ground leaving you on a island with this building. Inside you find 9 other people huddling around each other. You join them a began to survive.
For example, here I think you wanted "and" in the last sentence instead of "a". It's also really awkward to say you approach a large building, you're left with this building. The timeline of the way the sentence is constructed is a little too close and doesn't feel like a real approach. I also don't think "huddling around" each other was the image you wanted. It seems like they're touching and holding each other, but they're strangers, aren't they?
Anywhoo~ I like how open ended this is, and the strategy with the drug store and gym and stuff, too, rings of a video game. The only real thing I'd ask would be what's wrong with the world. Is it zombies or apocalypse? What are the characters trying to survive against?
PM me if you have any questions!
Good luck and keep writing ~
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