Young Writers Society

Hello Panda!!! Soul here to review for you!

Must state that reviewing poetry to me is always a challenge. Still, I do like this poem. The imagery is great. But maybe add in more colors than just three? It may add to the images being made. However, I find it very beautiful and not very much I find wrong such as grammar and spelling.

The second to last line seems rather long compared to the rest of the poem. Perhaps placing "revealed through the eyes" as a separate line? Again, only a suggestion on that but good job Panda!

I will be very sure to read more of your works! Hope this review gives some help and inspiration for you.

Sincerely,
Soulkana<3

Why hello there Panda! I'm just reviewing everything of yours today , Dogs once again with your review. To start, I really really liked this poem, you have such excellent imagery and I just love how you mixed the colors and gave us a whole new definition of them.

"It is new beginnings and serenity,"

Excellent vocab use here, I love the word serenity. Also, in this piece your rhyming is smooth as silk, I don't think I found any errors with the rhyming. Excellent excellent job there.

"It is joyful laughs on a summer day"

I think you should find a better descriptor for "on a" here. You could say "dancing on a summers.." or some other creative word that you can think of.

"and children running out to play"

Minor nit pick here, but "play" is the only word that seems just a tad bit forced in terms of the rhyming. Just at tad, try editing that bit.

"The colors of the soul, revealed through the eyes,"

Well here "eyes" sounds also just a tiny bit forced. Also this line is a little too long in comparison to the rest of your poem, try cutting out some lines or maybe just breaking it in half. New line after "soul," All and all a lovely poem and I loved reading it. So far my favorite of what you've written , let me know if you ever need a review. Keep up the good work!

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