Okay. Much love. This poem captures something that I've come into rather recently. That is, almost everyone around me seems so perfect that it's like they're angels and I'm some castoff demon. Untrue, but you don't see them for their faults, but in the ways they're superior to you. If you're me, anyway. Or like me.
Basically, it felt like you put a camera in my mind and took a snapshot of a sliver of my psyche. I adore that.
I'm also somewhat jealous because the only thing that really caught me up was one thing, the rest was quite smooth to my mind's ear.
Here's one thing I noticed that is somewhat problematic:
"That the pieces that don't fit,
Are the ones that create the puzzle."
I get the idea, but the juxtaposition of pieces that don't fit with a puzzle. Pieces not fitting into a puzzle you're working on? Frustration. Aggravation. Annoyance. Maybe you wanted to invoke that? But it makes it seem like that puzzle, the puzzle that seems to be something wanted, stands for perfection, being angelic, put together, which seems apart from the rest of this piece's meaning. If that makes sense?
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