Hi,
I love this poem in a weird sort of way. It is beautifully done for the most part and the use of metaphors is brilliant!
The only real thing I should say about this is that maybe the metaphors are overused but maybe they aren't. I know I'm not being very helpful (sorry) but what I'm trying to say is that you have all these amazing metaphors but you seem to cramp them in. This being sad (very badly, I apologize) I do love this poem, smart word play and very left of field.
The flow could be a tiney tiny bit better but overall well done!
Nargles xx
P.S sorry for being short and not very good!
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