This is a very good. I think that this poem does not need any scenes as many of the poems require. This poem is about a geisha like how she is and stuff. Here after reading the poem I could feel how she feels and what emotions she hides and how she tolerates everything. She entertain every one when inside she is carrying a battered bleeding heart. Anyway, now on to the poem. Everything is well maintained in your poem. You managed to maintain a good 4-4-4 pattern and punctuated it very well. However you might want to see the length of your lines and re-size some of them to create a smooth flow. It is a very good poem actually and the focus on the subject of the poem remains throughout the poem. Good Work! Well done and keep writing.
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