The opening lines made me think this was personal and so I prepared myself, watching out for some sort of revealation towards what the girl was feeling to make me feel the realistic sense in the story because this kind of thing is realistic and I like the awkwardness between the two, looking out for the exchange of glances and sheep-ishly smiles.
I'll start off with this, the little things like grammar annoyed me, it's a great story but little things like grammar have to be watched and be kept a close eye on because some people will easily pick up on them and then reveal them to be very annoying. Silly that a few mistakes like "finally, we were at here house" instead of "her house" can be found annoying, right? But people still feel the need to correct them and point them out, myself especially.
The ending I liked because it is a realistic thing, the girl trying to keep herself calm and keep her head held up high and forgive someone for something like rejection, it reminded me of myself in a way. Boy rejects girl, girl moves on but at the same time, they still keep the closeness between them, checking up on each other and eventually they know each other so well. It's a confusing love story for some unless you've been through it yourself.
I liked it a lot, for a short story, it didn't lack depth much.
Points: 750
Reviews: 8
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