Sonnet!

It is an impressive sonnet! I like it very much...You did an absolutely good job. However even though it is a sonnet, it requires a bit of grooming. Firstly you did not punctuate it at all and secondly you did it in one stanza when you could have tried doing it in two stanzas of 7 lines each. It looks a bit bulky the way it is now and you should change that. Other than that good job! Keep writing. Ciao!

I really enjoyed this piece. Your flow and word choice portrays your message rather well. And I didn't notice any spelling/grammar mistakes either.
However, I would've done the format differently to make it more clear and refined looking. Like this:
Let Time's prime youth have His Golden Ages

And well the wit with willowy wonder

To conspire mere men to be such sages

And boast fairest fairs of Earth's young father

Let their rhyme, be more dateless than Time

Behold of beauties of fabled compare

And speak of those leased by pen's potent rhyme

And see the unseen but without one stare

For those sweet have not humbly beheld

She who inspires all heavenly envy

She, mortal maiden, but in my heart held

Love's truest crown, more fabled than fancy

For she, the beauty beyond stories told

With such a face no immortal may mold

Anyway, it's just a suggestion.
I loved this piece!

keep it up

w&w