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Hey Jem! Sorry I'm late.
Anyways, actually I have no experience of reviewing poetry and I don't even review it. So, I'm sorry because I don't think I'd be of any help.
But I would have to say that the thought you picked up was brilliant. I mean, the topic is not something very unique but I like the approach you had-showing the superficial girl with the help of makeup. That was innovative.
Though, I felt that somewhere all the actions took the space. You had a strong message but somewhere I felt it wasn't conveyed as strongly as it could have been. Your last line was powerful but I would want you to explore and delve into the subject more.
I hope this helps even a bit.
I'm a guy, so I can't really see through a lady's perspective, but I still like it. I like the narrative view. I also like how it explains what you can feel like when you apply make up, mainly because I have NO clue.
Good work, keep writing.