Hi there, Ellie-Mae here for a quick review!
Wishing you a happy day/evening/morning/night/whatever is applicable to your part of the world! First off, please remember that my reviews are my own opinions I’ll give honest feedback, but nothing at all is intended to hurt or discourage you in any way at all! <3 So, without waiting any longer, let’s get right into it and digest the spectabulous piece of literary work!
this was quite an interesting read. it was well written and I applaud you for that! it seems strange to me that someone, trying to. help the homeless would use this as their approach:
"Hey. So. I'm assuming you have no place to go. So, uh. I'm just gonna pick you up. Ok? I'm gonna carry you to my place."
He moved as he spoke, stooping to awkwardly shift the rumpled form into his arms.
"Whoa, hey, I'm not gonna do anything! I just wanna get you someplace warm and dry. Even hobos have the sense to get out of this weather, ya got me? So stop shakin' like that!"
besides that it was interesting, but I wish there was a bit more connection to the characters. but for being such a short piece it was awesome!
Ellie- Mae
Points: 9965
Reviews: 208
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