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Set In Stone

by stargazer9927


He likes me, he likes me not
Those are the words I said again and again
I’m trying not to pretend
I like the way I act when I’m around you
I’m the person I’ve always loved and knew
 
You always ask about my day
Things always seem to go my way
I’m not admitting what I never could before,
But just know I wish I could run into you more
 
And I’m just going to keep on denying
No, you won’t see my crying
To admit I liked a guy was somewhat insane
But my feelings for you couldn’t be more plain
I don’t know if you like me back,
But I do know the way you make me act
Friend or not I don’t know,
But I do know I love your glow
For now, it’s not set in stone
 
My past is a mess of complications
It’s due mostly to my family relations
You seem perfect all around,
And you never seem to make anyone frown
I never thought I was worthy,
I never thought it would end up like this,
But I don’t feel like I’ve hit and miss
 
I never imagined falling for a guy like you
When it came to guys, I’ve liked many more than a few
But there was something about you that caught my eye
Why did I ever think you would stop to give me as much as a hi?
But you did just that, and I never knew how to act
Crazy comes as crazy goes
I guess I’ll never know
 
And I’m just going to keep on denying
No, you won’t see my crying
To admit I liked a guy was somewhat insane
But my feelings for you couldn’t be more plain
I don’t know if you like me back,
But I do know the way you make me act
Friend or not I don’t know,
But I do know I love your glow
For now, it’s not set in stone
 
Next year you’ll be gone
It’s crazy to think I’m about to miss my chance
I never liked to dance,
But sometimes I wish I could with you
Looking at girls is forbidden right now I would imagine,
But what would one date do?
 
I don’t want to miss my chance,
But I don’t want to fall into romance
How can a girl know what to do?
How can I get out of this without feeling blue?
How can I admit that I may just like you?
 
And I’m just going to keep on denying
No, you won’t see my crying
To admit I liked a guy was somewhat insane
But my feelings for you couldn’t be more plain
I don’t know if you like me back,
But I do know the way you make me act
Friend or not I don’t know,
But I do know I love your glow
For now, it’s not set in stone
 
Do you ever think of me too?
Do you ever wonder if I think of you?
Do you look at other girls?
Do you have one that seems to be your whole world?
Are you just nice because that’s the way you are,
Or are your feelings just one step below par?
 
I only wish I knew
I only wish you just had a clue
I can only wait to see what the future will bring
We may never see each other again
This might just be all for pretend
But this much I do know,
I’ll never forget your glow
 
And I’m just going to keep on denying
No, you won’t see my crying
To admit I liked a guy was somewhat insane
But my feelings for you couldn’t be more plain
I don’t know if you like me back,
But I do know the way you make me act
Friend or not I don’t know,
But I do know I love your glow
For now, it’s not set in stone
 
Crazy comes as crazy goes
I guess I’ll never know
 

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Mon Feb 06, 2012 10:18 pm
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Up&Out here as requested!

You have yourself a great poem. I really like the couplet "crazy comes as crazy goes/ I guess I'll never know" because it describes love and likes perfectly. That's my favorite part :)

But down to business...

First stanza - The first and second lines are good, setting up a bit of a rhythm, but the third one kind of steps out of it. I understand that this is lyric and that in some cases when writing lyric a tune is set in your head to go along with the words, at least that's how it is with me. To keep on track with rhythm, try saying them along to the tune or even singing them. It helps with the timing.

The first two lines in the chorus kind of threw me off for a second. "And I'm just going to keep on denying/ No, you won't see my crying" First of all, are you denying that he won't see your crying or are you denying your feelings? Is it supposed to be ME crying or MY crying?

Also, the last line in the chorus - I love the "not set in stone" part by the way - the rhythm is off in it. Try "For now, it's just not set in stone" or something like that.

And that's about it :) If you have any questions, feel free to PM me





"What is a poet? An unhappy person who hides deep anguish in his heart, but whose lips are so formed that when the sigh and cry pass through them, it sounds like lovely music."
— Søren Kierkegaard, Philosopher & Theologian