Addicted

I'm dying of thirst,
and you are my brine.

Interesting analogy, though I'm not sure it fully works. After all, wine is drunk, but brine cannot be.

The symptoms are my loneliness

This line is overly long, and so it breaks the rhythm, and by extension, the rhyme since rhyme relies upon rhythm to work.

Overall, this poem was quite simple, though you did have a very promising start. The brine image, if you were to expand on it, could be made to really work, though in its current form, it's a bit incongruous. If you explained how brine and wine are similar, or how perhaps elaborated on the drunkard being in a situation where he can see the wine, but not drink it, it could become a fairly strong image.

Otherwise, this poem wasn't particularly memorable, and by the end, it had firmly entrenched itself in the area of "typical love poem". If you could just sustain the unique images you had in the beginning, this piece could be so much more than just another generic love poem.

This was a well written poem. It had a very nice flow and rhythm to it. I enjoyed the rhyming, and none of it seemed forced. I was just being carried through it. You had a nice use of figurative language in here as well. The only thing about this poem, is that the idea behind it is kind of cliche and overused. I still think that you manged to make it unique and your own, but this is the only thing that is holding your poem back. It reminds me of something that I have read or heard before. However, I did enjoy it and you do have talent
One nit-pick:

how did you make me,
fall in love with you?

I would just add in a comma, to help the flow.
Also, I felt like this line interrupted the rhythm:

Withdrawal befalls

Overall, this was a nice poem and I liked it. Pm if you have any questions!