Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression: Well, at first glance this seems like a really cool premise here and there are soo many questions that we as the readers find ourselves wanting to ask. Definitely a solid looking start.
Anyway let's get right to it,
For all those fatalists out there wondering what the end of the world will be like, here’s a hint: it’s boring. Dead boring. Out-of-my-mind-with-boredom boring.
Yep, this is Kaito K, live from the end of the world, somewhere in Beirut, Lebanon. Temperatures are way below normal for December – global warming considered. My fellow survivor, Abigail, thinks it’s just another one of them natural phenomena, but I beg to differ. Water in glasses freeze overnight, which cannot be normal for Beirut.
OKay...well, that does sound like the sort of temperature that should be killing a human, or at least coming very close to doing that...unless there's a loot of warm clothes in the mix...and well...at any rate, this is a really interesting way to kick of this whole apocalypse style situation here...I always love stories of that nature.
How do I know the world is ending? Well, five months ago, on a fine clear night, everybody in the world fell asleep. Abigail and me were the only ones who woke up. Or, of course, it’s only the whole of Europe that fell asleep, and everybody in the other parts of the world are hiding somewhere, far from human contact. Which seems distinctly unlikely, so we decided the first option was more like it.
Well, you can never tell, there's definitely a chance that you two are not the only ones that woke up...although considering this is a story...its probably only you two. At any rate, this does seem like some pretty hard evidence that the world is ending, so I'd totally agree with that conclusion there.
I was on a plane when I fell asleep. Even I’d expected the Boeing 747 to end up as a massive metallic grease spot somewhere in Europe, but I’d found myself in one piece in the Arrivals lounge at Heathrow International. Which was queer enough, without all the cobwebbed people. Everybody in the airport, in London, in Britain, in every town we’d passed through, everybody was wrapped from head to toe in silvery webbing, virtually unbreakable – I’d tried – and icy to the touch.
Hmm, they should've definitely lead with that one...cause that is a much creepier sounding reason to believe in the end of the world than the just everyone falls asleep start...you don't want to leave out details this good at grabbing attention for too late in the story after all.
They’d just fallen sleep wherever they’d been during the Night! Pedestrians curled up on the pavement, foodies pushed their plates aside and started snoring, software engineers stayed awake long enough to set their computers to sleep before nodding off themselves.
The electricity lasted for two months before it stopped, then started up again after less than a month. It was strange and unnerving, but very convenient. We checked the radio every morning, even though there were no broadcasts, just endless rotation music.
OKay...well you can something big has definitely taken place...and the biggest question to ask is what exactly caused only these two people to be spared. I suppose at the very least the two of them can be grateful that the only two to be awake were so close to each other, or they'd have both just been alone..at any rate, I'm quite interested to see what the explanations behind all of this might be.
Then, a month ago, we began to hear the first voices. In London it was little less than a murmur, but in Beirut it was a definite voice, though we couldn’t make out any words. It sounded like somebody, but we didn’t know who it was or where we were picking this up from.
So we set off in the direction it was clearest. It led us to Lebanon, and we’re still hunting.
Well...this is a solid little start to a first chapter here...although I must confess, this is a little bit of an unsatisfactory ending...it kind of just tells us the story of the world and what they're doing before it ends...I feel like there should be a bit more happening here before this abrupt cut off. This isn't the best choice of cliffhanger here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall, this makes for a really fun start here...there's definitely a few interesting details that I would question, but I don't there's anything too glaring wrong to the point that I can nitpick those details in the very first chapter. So yeah, good job here
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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