Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
A funny thing happened today, me and petunia were just sitting on the swings. so i got bored of just swinging backwards and fourth and i think Petunia knew what i was going to do because, before i did anything she shouted Lilly don't do it, so i simply jumped and kind of flown through the air and landed lightly on the ground. Should have seen petunia's face she was in shock horror. When i tuned around to look at her she was saying something about mummy not liking it at all, well i just laughed at her face. She looked to funny trying to be all strict and serious so i thought i would creep her out some more. i called her over and to a near by bush and picked up a flower. i opened my palm and forced it's petals to open and close of course Petunia shrieked and asked me how i did it when i dropped it, which was when the funny thing happened! a skinny black haired boy wearing short jeans, a shabby over large coat and a odd smock like top jumped out of know where and said he knew how i could do this 'magic' stuff he called me a witch and he said his mum was one and he was a wizard, how ever Petunia fell about laughing coldly and said she knew him he was the Snape boy who lived down spinners lane by the river. Apparently he had been spying on me and Petunia his cheeks went very red when Petunia asked him why, he turned around and called her a muggle. What is that? And how did he know me?
Okay...as someone who has read quite a bit of Harry Potter...this is something that's always fun to run into. There are hundreds of thousands of HP fanfics out there so someone has probably done something like this but personally I've never run into something quite from this perspective before, so this makes for a fresh new look at the lore there.
This seems to be playing off the few scenes we saw in the movies, I think....I don't fully remember, but I think I saw a scene like this at some point. At any rate, I think as far as a diary entry goes, this one passes the test. You'd expect someone Lily's age to react somewhat like this and also write down an event like this in here diary...so makes for a solid little start.
And well, I don't really have much wrong to point out here, except for maybe the fact that this is perhaps a little too long to be a single paragraph. There's certainly a couple of scenes taking place here so it would make sense to split it up into two smaller pieces here.
Other than that, yeah, this is a pretty solid diary entry here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Im guessing the spelling mistakes were on purpose?
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