This poem is lovely, Liz! It really captures the feeling of missing a childhood and reflecting on how things used to be. I really loved these lines:
only candyfloss, castles and carousels.
i believe in the utter purity of magenta
ribbons, blonde curls and tiny teeth.
I love how you used alliteration to really help the flow. This is something I have seen in your poems that has really drawn me into your writing, as I have gone back and read some of your older poems. I think you are really a poetic master! This poem feels very flowy, for example, some sentences feel like they go on for a very long time. but it isn't in a way that makes me feel bored.
these lines:
time racks on, clearing its throat like i do,
my cough crackly and static like a dying clock.
how lovely is your writing I love the idea of time "clearing its throat" and the fact that you are able to bring that back to you, back to the ice cream and sweets, back to being a child, growing up, and losing what you had </333
love this, as always!
Ellie-Mae
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